Non-fiction / 6 Word Memoir II (Analysis)

It’s a pun on a quotation – and it works!  I will be surprised if you’re not one of ‘the chosen’ – although I can’t help feeling you’ve – if not exactly cheated, then at least taken a short cut.  But very well done.

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July 28, 2008

by Krysis

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I’m curious to know this “cheat/shortcut” i took (in a constructive way). Can you elaborate a little?

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Very nice, makes ya think =D

The subject matter to me is a male, “Well fed.” strikes me masculine. Along with well fed the traveler does not seem like a poor college student but someone financially sound, restless and in charge.

“Fed,” no capitalization.
My preference is not to ask the reader a question, with any poems. I’d rather have a direct statement from the writer, it’s as if the subject is giving away his power and choice, asking the reader to finish the poem for the writer.
I could say Bermuda, Norway, a new relationship, etc., but these “places” may have already been traveled. It’s not my poem.

I like to read that you are going someplace fantastic. The six worders give me a chance to imagine and be creative, so I expect that from the author. The lower rating is not directed toward the writer.

At the end it gave me a chuckle, it is very clever.

I like it. Simple, yet leaves more to be said, and clever wording for a bit of a chuckle. Good luck!

Hm.  Leaves me wondering: yes, where now?  I hope your “where” becomes “here” soon.

Kinda eh. Not sure what it has to do with the creative life.