Short Story / Developing An Open Mind (Analysis)

I think this is poignant but relevant to everyone, whether they are a writer or not, so I don’t think it’s right for Brevity. But good regardless.

“Brevity is the soul of WIT”

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July 28, 2009

by GillBranion

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Well said!  Thank you!

-Michael

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As an aphorism it might work, if “substitute…for” is replaced by “substitute.. by” and “Blinders” is replaced by “Blinkers”.

As it stands, it sounds like a recommendation for close-mindedness.

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July 17, 2009

by GillBranion

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I strongly disagree, but welcome your input…

-Michael

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As a quote, this is very good. Though it’s not a short story. I know the 6-word thing is all the rage now, but this is really more advice than anything that suggests a story, as Hemmingway’s famous piece did.

Interesting, kind of mordant. I like your style.

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January 29, 2009

by GillBranion

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Thanks!  I am very flattered!

-Michael

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Does this really qualify as a short story? I am not sure. But, it is a clever piece of advice.

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January 09, 2009

by GillBranion

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Thank you for your very kind Critique!

-Michael

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I’m not sure I understand it.

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November 04, 2008

by GillBranion

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I am not sure the world understands its importance, but we must try to…

-Michael

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Quite an interesting take on cultural blinders. Yes, this is a more open expression: looking more closely through the corrective lens of humanity.

While I love the expression, I don’t think you need the words surrounding it. Substitute . . . for . . . could be more creative. Still, nice thought.

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October 24, 2008

by GillBranion

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Thank you for your extremely nice review!

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You are SO right in just these few, but insightful words.

Society has – for so long, kept us from seeing the ‘good’ in every person’s inner being. Each person can offer so much, if only allowed.

I love this memoir that you bring into the light for everyone to see. Now, if only people will just open their hearts.

All my best to you,
Rhonda

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September 21, 2008

by GillBranion

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Wow!

I have read some of your reviews for others work and I did not expect this wonderful praise…whew!

I am truly flattered because I know you are honest (and direct) in your critiques.

Thank you so much for this very kind review.

-Michael

September 22, 2008

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You are so welcome my friend.
You did a amazing job on, cashing in on the history of problems our society has had and still has.

God Bless,
Rhonda

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WOW!  That six word statement says a lot!  Once you start to really think about what it is saying, it seems the two points although valid are initially stunning but opposites.  If you are blind, do bifocals help at all?  But then you could argue: That’s the point here!

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August 03, 2008

by GillBranion

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Thank you so much for your very kind insight and review.

August 03, 2008

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You’re welcome.  DId you see mine titled: “So blind you can see”
You inspired it!
Thanks

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