Lyrics / Trife

cliche. be more daring.

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July 22, 2008

by evoloution

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No I shall remain cliche. What on Earth’s wrong with that?

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Ordinary idea for me, I’m sorry

The rhythm is fantastic but I’m not sure the sentiment is original or presented originally. You could tweak some parts to solidify the idea as your own: possibly “named” or “knighted” or some other more powerful endowment verb.

Too flat, sounds like stuff girls send to girls on the internet when they feel “special”
To me a memoir is a description of facts, not a philosophy or a statement of feelings.
If you write as you have, you should go into pe=oetry, there I could see it.
But I do not do poetry, I do life and the funny way it looks.
Best of luck
Cheers
PIM

i read r peace and i though that it was awesome it was very warm and smooth and nie and vry well said. did u make that up urself or did u get it from somewhere.

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July 18, 2008

by evoloution

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Yes I made it up my self whilst staring at a poster of James Dean. I guess I should thank him for the inspiration! Thank you for reading my lyric.

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Enjoyed this, though to me at least that this is not strictly a memoir.