Poetry / Tribute to the Veteran (Analysis)

wow!!! that piece is one of my favs of all of the ones that i have read. i thought that was a very powerful poem that u wrote. are u a shoulder or do u have someone in ur family that is one? that was so awesome so so so awesome. it was so clear at what u were saying and that was the most wonderful poem ive read
good job and goodluck with everything in ur life. :D

It’s about time someone told the truth. A thank-you goes a long way even if the gift is a priceless one, a life, one’s prime, one’s youth in exchange for PTSD or worse. In my head and my heart, I feel the sympathy, respect, and thanks but I must have passed many who did not see that in my smile because I’m not an actress, public speaker, or spokesperson so I’m afraid to approach a stranger who has just seen war or been damaged and say anything, even though they would probably like to hear anything one has to say.

I would insert a “you” in the line, But do you know what we’ve seen? I would delete “of” from the line, From those of whom we serve. I liked the rhythm and the rhyme, I thought it appropriate here. I was very moved by this piece. Well done.