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Once upon a time in a land of golden corn and brown bean fields rustling in the wind, there lived a little girl who loved to read. And as she read she was transported to far-away places of magic and fantasy, where dragons were slain, knights rescued maidens, and virtue and honor were rewarded. She began to write her own versions of these stories. Being a kind-hearted child, in her versions no one died. The evil were either banished to another world/island or turned into good creatures.
Dragons live forever, but not so little girls and boys…years later, the little girl now a grown woman, valiantly entered a college classroom in search of the key to becoming a writer. Her guide on this quest, requested she write an essay of her earliest memories of writing.
And so, she began her journey.
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An interesting blog to be sure… Are you the now grown young girl? I was wondering why this was placed in the third person, is this meant to be a preface for something that is to come? I would love to hear more about the maidens and dragons and foul naves that turn good in the end. Altogether, though it seemed like a flash in the pan, very well written. Sort of like a peek into a fairy fairytale waiting to be born.
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atm1721 reviewed Version 1 -
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Oh how being a child becomes something we can miss as we age. A time where the imagination streams forever past the horizon of reality. I wish at times that it was that easy to access those thoughts of no restrictions but they seem buried in a box in the back of the closet. Good write.
effervescentpsyche reviewed Version 1 -
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I thought that this was really cute, I liked it alot. I wish my fantasies as a child were like this, most kids were though. A child’s mind can be so pure and it’s amazing the things they come up with. As a child I thought of vampires an ghosts, but your journy sounds fun as well.
tia_logic reviewed Version 1 -
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As a journal, go team you.
If this is meant to be an actual essay, I’d think about re-working it a little. Expanding, for one. I’d paint a bigger picture of the girl as a child, the place she live(s/d), perhaps a face buried in a book.
1st sent: comma after “time” Remove “and” from beginning of sentence (assuming this is an ‘essay’)
2nd sent: you don’t need the comma before ‘and’. I’d refrain from “magic and fantasy”, since there’s a repetition of “virtue and honor”, “magic and fantasy”, World/island”. It’s inferred that a land of magic is a fantasy world, especially where there are dragons and such.
You’ve written “little girl” three times. It’s too short a piece, I’d think about finding a different way to say it.
Good luck!
SMRB reviewed Version 1 -
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The line “Dragons live forever, but not so little girls and boys… ” really covers such a large time span and is so descriptive in its expression, as is this whole piece.Great job.
sjvance reviewed Version 1 -
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Love it, love it! No errors that I saw. Very well written, and so much what little girls dream of. This writing made me smile.
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