Poetry / Alles ist Liebe-Six Word Memoir

I’d just love or no concession.

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rerouted2remain avatar General Stranger

September 29, 2008

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This does not fully make sense to me. The word “concession” does not seem to fit in the overall grammer.

ScorpionHunter avatar General Stranger

September 27, 2008

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Potentialy confusing, but interesting and thought provoking.

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August 20, 2008

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WOW. I have no clue what that big word means, but the way you used it made this sound like the true work of a poetic genius! Great job!

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August 07, 2008

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Just to out there… If they can’t understand it what’s thepoint of reading it.

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July 28, 2008

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this is certainly poetic in that it provokes the reader to search and understant the underlying meaning, which i did and then realized “i get it” at this point i felt this message is deep. In the end ho9wever i don’t know how well it would work to the multitudes of readers since many just want to understand without further research or reading.

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July 27, 2008

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Alles ist Liebe

German title . I  translated it on google and came up with Everything is Love. If I hadn’t used a translater, my guess at it would be All is Love.  Nice title.

What you have written as your 6 words is not proper English and not easily understood. It sounds like what you wrote was written in German and you used a translator to come up with the english version.  It’s a good idea, but not clear enough in meaning to be in an English language non-fiction book.

“I’d just love or no concession.”

I think I understand what you mean to say- I give all my love and I won’t accept  less.

Truthfully, submit it in your native language, it comes out better.  

Willow_Wren avatar General Stranger

July 26, 2008

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The title escapes one unless they know German, and to do research for 6 words is presumptuous at best. Does it mean All is Love or something like that? As to the memoir ‘I would just love’ seems to lessen the importance of the emotion ‘just’ being the quantifier that lessens the statement. It weakens it. I would love is so much more powerful. Now how do you get 6 words to say what you mean? What do you mean? I would love, make no concessions. A possibility if that is in line with what you mean. Your meaning is vague, and how is it a memoir of your life in 6 words? It has potential but still unrealized.

sjvance avatar General Stranger

July 26, 2008

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Sorry, this just doesn’t make sense.  Reads as though you are missing parts of a sentence.

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July 26, 2008

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I am not sure what this means. I’d just love or no induldgence, compromise, allowance? These are some of the meanings of concession. You might change that word.  Good try though Sandi

mikeseed avatar General Stranger

July 26, 2008

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to me this doesn’t seem to make a whole lot of sense.  Love is one of the biggest selfless concessions one could ever make.

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