“marked down to move” is a pretty common expression for “reduced in price to sell quickly”. I really don’t understand why people find this so confusing.
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Author’s heart marked down to move.
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PC reviewed Version 1 -
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I don’t think everyone can put a whole story into six words. But you did. It fits the description for the six word memoir perfectly. A piece of work, a authors heart and joy, gets marked down to be sold. How moving and tragic. Also well done on how you managed to get the sentence somehow give the sense of shrinking down. I don’t know exactly why it seems that way to me, but if it was intentional, i’m very impressed. Take care. pc
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SoulSubstance reviewed Version 1 -
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It’s good, but I don’t think I understand it. The question I want to ask is where is it supposed to take it? One reading I had is that the Author’s emotions are marked down to move to a new place, almost like someone who is buying a new house would move, but I don’t think that’s what you were trying to get across.
Let me know if you don’t understand my questions!
:)
Fenvy reviewed Version 1 -
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I think I understand the double meaning that you’ve created. The author’s heart is leaving a place or it is a forced departure, because of the marking. I also see it as a bookmark in a novel being written, maybe. Obviously there can not only be two…right? Overall I think it’s pretty solid because the words “marked down” are the eye catchers. I’m curious to know the meaning.
ParticoRomulus reviewed Version 1 -
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I see both meanings, though the less obvious one might be too opaque. Even if not, the tone of the overt meaning is so negative that switching gears to see ‘marked down’ as writing down your deepest feelings might be too much of a jump for some. Even if not, it feels a bit of a stretch to me to aim for such divergent interpretations, though that may be subjective. Anyway, it is mechanically effective, but doesn’t strike me as powerfully as the one with the prices even though that only has one proper interpretation.
Enigma28 reviewed Version 1 -
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I find this intruiging. I can definitely relate to this quote from a writers point of view but I’m missing the two meanings. Interesting nonetheless.
Thanks for sharing
Jodie
Sharon reviewed Version 1 -
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It’s a little unclear. I don’t think I read the previous version. Does it reference retail? Like your heart is priced down for a fast sell? If it does, then it took me a minute to figure it out, but it’s a clever way of putting it. I think it might be better with “Author’s words…” than “Author’s heart…” The way it is reads like your desperate for a relationship or love. ”Author’s words…” reads more like your hungry to get your book published or at least recognized. If I’m totally off base, then strike everything I wrote! Good luck.
imranda reviewed Version 1 -
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I found this very witty – I actually gasped right as I finished reading it. Very, very intriguing, poignant, a little mysterious, and again witty. =] Thanks for sharing this! I’d love to use this as a quote somewhere…
Mernard reviewed Version 1 -
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I quite liked it. As for the two meanings; one being that the author pours his being into his work for it to “move” someone. The other being…he’s an organ donor? Probably not, haha.
Static reviewed Version 1 -
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Definately a great memoir! Even though the words are reasonably vague and don’t literally express the true meaning of the piece, they conjure up the desired image in the reader’s mind; “author’s heart marked down to move” makes it sound like someone’s made a note that a literal heart is going to randomly move (when the piece is read literally). BUT these words will always conjure a specific image in a writer’s mind because every writer is familiar with the concept; we pour our heart and soul into a piece and it’s discounted so that the seller can be rid of it.
I have to say though, I still like the “was” version (if this is DCAllan, like I believe it is, you’ll know what I mean)
Good work!
pradapoet reviewed Version 1 -
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I’d add a comma after “heart”. I’m only getting one meaning—a fire sale. I was think “marked down” like edited but this seems like a stretch.
I’m not sure about your word choice—”heart”. ”Heart” can suggest romance.
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