Poetry / Wave Crest to Breaking Point (Analysis)

i like it overall. there’s a hopelessness-in-redundancy vibe going on with it that i like. there is a nice hybrid of beat and h.s. thompson with a more traditional form. I think the last two lines, though, could be replaced with something better.

I like this poem because of the contrasts between the writer defining his “life styles, his experience with hedonistic writing() and gonzo journalism. This has so much potential because of the uniqueness of contrast between the powerful forces of nature and of writers.

Suggest factual and fiction incidents/imagery interlaced in one stanza of even lines. I think this would show nuance and iron between gonzo journalism and accepted form of poetry. I don’t understand who the poem addresses. It starts off addressing the reader, or an unknown character, or Kerouac, and then ends with the writer as the subject.

You use hedonistic twice but don’t describe with imagery of the behavior. I think more references to gonzo would be appropriate since it replace hedonism. I think the two are euphemisms for conflict within the writer’s (writers’) mind. Alma matters may symbolize the hope experienced in the past but now are waves dashed upon the rocks. Hedonism may also imply selfishness of the writer.

Because I am familiar with Hunter Thompson and Kerouac, I’d like to see references to gonzo journalists that aren’t as well know, like Wolfe, Bangs and Plimpton. Are you alluding to Kerouac as a hedonist or gonzo?

Structure/form: three stanzas that address three different items, change, the sense of place, and a rejection to former ideas. Lines unwieldly, may want to even them out with equal words or syllables. Would help rythmn.

cadence and rhythm: internally you have hard consonats rubbing up against soft,
1st stz flows smooth but last line trips up the reader with hard “ka’s.” One stanza may be appealing on the printed page and to an editor.

I may be off on some things here. I didn’t paste a lot because I addressed the theme and some basics. Pardom MY grammar.

Blessings.

I sense a youthful angst and a desire-to-please. In reviewing we’re counselled to not make nebulous comments, but I feel like saying keep the desire… lose the angst. Nevertheless, thank you for this piece.

This one makes you think. Youthful hedonistic desires replaced by gonzo journalism. Thompson would be so proud. Be a youthful poet, but grow up and get a job.
I believe you meant alma mater- but if your didn’t, I do like alma matter, too.
The poem expresses the wish that we all have~ to sit and ponder the greats, wonder if we can create that too,who wants to grow up?
I don’t know how to react to the waste energy line because although dreaming to some is a waste of energy- it’s what keeps us going day after day, isn’t it?
Love the ocean imagery.