Humor/Satire / Memoir

Life, perfectly summarized!  Only one thing, if you use a semi-colon I wouldn’t capitalize ‘sexually.’  Probably okay to capitalize if you use a colon.  I think, best one of these yet.

i liked it funny and true. never thought about it that way but a great way to describe beginning and end.

A memoir is a piece of autobiographical writing, usually shorter in nature than a comprehensive autobiography.

This is not a memoir, not a story of, from, or about your life; this is a catch-phrase of fact, presented silly.  For humor/satire, I’ve heard it before and I kind of chuckled, then; this time I nodded.

Your use of punctuation is appalling. You use two marks, one absolutely misplaced and the other pointless.

A semicolon is placed before an introductory word in the middle of a sentence, not after the subject at the beginning of a sentence; and the beginning of the following clause is not capitalized.  A subject is always followed by a comma or, in more formal presentations such as this, by a colon.

Life:

The exclamation mark should appear if this were dialog in a story and this was the punch-line response to someone’s question: “What is life?” or something like that.  Putting the exclamation point there in narrative simply suggests that your narrator is screaming this information at the reader.  But that takes the comedy out of it and turns it into horror, by virtue that this is a very true fact.  If you want this statement to come off funny, put it into a public service message.

All that said, though, it is still not a memoir.

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July 31, 2008

by TourmentedSoulz

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Thank you. Of all of the readers you are the first to actually critique my writing. Feel free to critique my others as well. While you will find most of them a bit sloppy with grammar, I am almost certain that you will find that although in dire need of revising, some are actually decent.

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Medically sound.Yin/yang kind of feeling.It’s a truth. It’s funny, but I didn’t laugh.

Nice!  That is good.  Life is the worst STD one could get, for sure.  I’m kind of at a loss for words- that is funny and witty and yeah…

the exclamation point at the end gives it some nice kick but i’m not sure about the semi-colon.  How about a nice dash? ”-?”  or not.  it works.  

well, done.  very well done.  thanks.  

Good observation – but (unless you’re a heck of a lot better performer than me) I don’t see the relation to art.

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July 30, 2008

by TourmentedSoulz

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In order to preform on any level , one must first have some sort of experience in life which motivates them. All artists, one day perish… hence why I wrote this.

July 30, 2008

by Marvin

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everything is related to art.  art is related to art.  trident needs some gum….what an ill pun that was.  quip?  who  cares.  

July 30, 2008

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lol… indeed.

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Me likey!!!