Humor/Satire / Frisky on Fridays

I love this one, I like the use of coyly which compliments no peeking. And the end line just sums it all up. Great job, your six words makes the reader well aware of what is going on, bravo! Adding to my favs!

I think this would go down well with a black and white picture of clark kent and lois lane with her top off.

Clever, but the first word “coyly,” jars with rest of the statement.  Good idea, though.

Good work. This shows remarkable talent; it takes great skill to use just 6 words to make a such a brief but powerful image. Special kudos to crafting a story that can seem either incredibly innocent or risque’ depending on the reader.

Why Fridays? Unless this is a statement from Saturday morning.

It’s well-written, but certainly nothing within the guidelines for the competition. What does someone watching you dress have to do with your experience as a writer or narrator?

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August 15, 2008

by KatieDub226

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Inspiration.

Thanks for the review.

August 15, 2008

by alexianx

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Actually, you should ask for a refund on this review. I can’t believe I wrote it and would blame it on the fact I hadn’t slept in 32 hours at the time, but that’s still no excuse.

August 15, 2008

by alexianx

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Though I have to add that even when I’ve slept it lacks clarity. It’d be hopeful if even a narrow portion of your readers decipher your intent.

August 20, 2008

by KatieDub226

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Thanks for following up. Really.

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Ha!  It’s great and there’s a back story that can be interpreted in my imagination.  Obviously there’s a sexual reference that ignites a little spark of curiousity at who is speaking  Which is another thing, don’t know if it’s a male or female voice which heightens my interest.  Good job.

Hahahahaha sounds like you have a very sordid life as a writer =P
Sounds like something my girlfriend would write. Love the humor in it!
Good work, good luck and high marks!

easily could be just me, but this shot over my head?

hmmm…sounds scandalous!  The shirtless inviting the sightless to open his eyes.  I like it.  

It’s clever, and i enjoy the word “coyly.”  6words in a challenge.  i think you’ve climbed the hill.  

evocative, provocative, and any other “cative” you can muster.  well done.  thanks for sharing.  

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August 03, 2008

by KatieDub226

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Scandal indeed. Thanks for the kind words.

August 04, 2008

by Marvin

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no problem.

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