Poetry / onemiss
dear lady full of marmalade, making lemonade, while on a promenade, butteflies in your hair, raise your eyelids to the sun rays creeping in through the vines, which grow on the old grey, paint stripped window pane, dont cut your veins, i would be in pain, we have never met, but knowing you this long makes me want to stand in pouring rain, with arms spread out wide, welcoming your dark side, hoping you understand, hoping i understand, the mend, of this fucked up life, i dont want to fuck you, i want to look into your eyes while u inhale smoke from a cigarette, dont hop on that plane, because i dont want to be a dissapointment, turn that fucked up frown, all the fuckng way upside down, because you are much more beautiful alive
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This is so raw! it is exciting. there is ryhme and repitition both are on point, not at all cliche or over used, imagery and metaphors that are lyrical and free. The only part the would be considered cliche has a twist that kicks cliche out of the ball park and that is “turn that fucked up frown, all the fuckng way upside down” I loved it and laughed out loud because it was enticing and funny at the same time. Great work.
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