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3:54 am
its 3:54 am , once agian awake and enraged. I can only see a fan , the glow of the t.v and a 6 ft bong thats cleverly disguised as a tree. I spent most of my day in the attic with some intent of curing the bordem that ciruclates through me veins at that point. In there i found 5 guitars laying on the floor next to a pile of christmas decroations that hadent been touched since the early 70’s. The rest of the day was filled with relaxation , expensive relaxation at that. So now here i sit at 4 am now , wrestling with the idea of starting a small fire and screaming at the roomate to get the hell out , we’ll see.
It’s been quite some time since ive been in what the masses would call my element, its draining , like Bridman and the shade. Ive lost touch with the world as a whole living in some kind of fog , mist or some other form of condensation. But thats how you survive in this big world anymore , that and you cant forget your towel ha!
-Still getting headaces
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Howya,
I enjoyed this somewhat throw-away entry. I guess it is evocative of a kind of lifestyle that charges the occasional 4 in the morning soul-sick horrors as the price of the four in the afternoon pillow.
Yeah Douglas Adams’s ‘Long Dark Tea-Time of the Soul’ reminds us that it is indeed a really cool frood who knows where his towel is. The existential dilemma in which your speaker is suffering can easily be cured by some physical exercise, casual sex, or playing Ella FitzGerald loud and on repeat.
Anyhow crit:
Spelling and punctuation
1)boredom,
2)circulates,
3)decorations,
4)hadn’t, I’ve, it’s, that’s, can’t, headaches
5)Capitalize the start of sentances and proper nouns.
6)Commas are peppered randomly throughout like sprinkles.
Content
1)”Like Bridman and the shade” I don’t know what this means, maybe something I’m unaware of.
2)I don’t know it’s a bit nebulous, but it’s a journal entry so I guess that’s your thing.
Good luck with the writing – get a CAT scan (only joking ha ha)
Bosco
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