Poetry / Still (Analysis)

I really liked the vivid imagery and the nostalgia.  I just don’t understand the last line.  Overall, I have an instant fondness for this one.

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August 16, 2008

by anonymous

Thanks for your review. I misspelled a word in the last line. It should be petaled pumps (as in “with
flowers”), not pedaled.

August 19, 2008

by BlueDemoness

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That does make a difference :O)  except for the square part, what does that mean?  Just because I’m a little dense doesn’t mean others won’t understand fully on the first read.  Thank you for sharing.

August 19, 2008

by anonymous

The square is just one section of a checkered patterned  marble floor. Thanks for the help.

August 21, 2008

by BlueDemoness

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ahh, now it’s a complete picture for me, and unlike others don’t feel it needs anything more nor less. very clever :O)

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I picture a dance floor or a party, perhaps New Year’s Eve?

I also see that this could be metaphorical. Though I can’t quite ingest “pedaled pumps”—what is that?

Great poem. Paints an amusing picture. Well done :)

I cant tell if this is a “morning after” poem or if its about the passing of time in your life or literally a distant memory… diffrent things, but either way i liked it, just wish it was more clear.

Liked the remincient tone of the piece but I think that you could expand and add a little more discription.