Haiku/Senryu / Agoraphobic (Analysis)

I think this only works because of the title.  Without the clue in the title, I wouldn’t get the subject.  The tricky part is getting the concept of agoraphobia into the body of the piece.  It’s a 5 syllable word, so could be the ‘reveal’ in L3.  Good luck.

Ok, this is a nice senryu.  I like how you use the traditional themes of nature, including the kigo.  You also seem to blend human emotion into this.  While nice, this is not a part of traditional haiku, but I guess I am just a stickler.  I like the title of the haiku, and the overall theme.  I would certanly eliminate “The,” from the beginning of the second line.  This is considered filler in haiku and could be replaced.  Overall, very nice imagery and emotion.  I felt something.

I really like this. It is decidedly moving, expressive and emotional which is a good achievement from such a short piece. Good work, keep it up.

depressing but easy to relate to.  at least get out and mow the lawn, will ya?

“The long evening of summer” is a nice bit, however, the longest day of the year, sunshine-wise, is the summer solstice, which happens in June.  maybe think about that, but staying pent up indoors until august and beyond is effective as well.

nice piece.  thanks for sharing.