Non-fiction / Pictures from My Mind

I think that it takes too much explanation in your reviewer’s note to make the actual submission fully clear. Without that explanation, I would have taken it to mean that you have a lot of day-dreams, or something like that.

You paint a very clear picture in 6 words, but it’s almost like a very frank statement, leaving little room for interpretation on the part of the reader. For example, instead of “imaginary” I might suggest a word like “fantastic”. It has more than one meaning and would cause the reader to think.

This is a  almost perfect, it definitely captures the creative life. Not only that however, you were able to get alliteration in there effectively! This is a big message  for only six words so good job on that. My only recommendation would be to put a little more time into the beginning to make it a complete thought, it seems like the 2nd half of a sentence or statement. Hard to say how to do this though and still only have 6 words, but actually you can make it more and submit it instead as a quote.

This is what a writer does. It speaks volumes of a writers life. I like it. Sandi

I like the sentence.  It says a lot in six words.  

One problem “Lots of” seems to be extra – in other words you can remove them and use the void create for something more stark and contrasting.

This sounds stronger to me as a base for you to work with:

Expressed imaginary practiced imagery.

Just a thought

What that tells me is that you’ve been drawing shapes (or images) that you conjure up in your mind.  I assume from this quote that you are not normally sketching or drawing pots, vases and fruit, but more of what you see in your own mind; your interpretation of settings, flowers or maybe even monsters – unique.  It’s interesting and is a good choice of six words.

I’m not a huge fan of the ‘lots of practice’ but I do like the Imaginary images part. I think you could make this far more profound.

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August 09, 2008

by Allex_Spires

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Well, it’s not as though there’s magic or intuition involved.  It’s try and fail, try and succeed, succeed and fail; but always try, and always learn from experience.  It’s practice and it never makes perfect, it only makes better.

That response aside, what do you consider to be profound and what would you suggest I do to make it more profound?

August 09, 2008

by Enigma28

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I think that within your last two words you give this picture of the mind ‘Imaginary images’ but the first four words seem to discount it. Although what you have written above gives me a better sense of what you were getting at. I know it’s hard to be more specific in 6 words but what you wrote above sounds better than what you have in your original six words. try and fail, try and succeed and fail but always try – thats awesome and that is profound – how you get that into 6 words? I don’t know but that grabs my attention more than your original piece.

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This is one of the best of the 6-word memoirs I’ve read, maybe the best. I love what it’s saying, or at least what I’m getting from it, which is that writers, as well as artists, have the hard task of making the invisible visible by expressing through words or pictures little pieces of our minds. And yes, it does take lots of practice, as you said. Great work!