Quotes / Six Word Memoir

yes.  you can stop now.  it’s perfect.  very clever piece.  often, too much revising only makes things worse.  the initial idea is lost, the punch is softened, the heart bled dry.

the quotes make me wonder if they’re aren’t two people talking and the end makes me wonder if maybe it was only one person talking to himself and then thinking.  it’s good.  it packs quite a bit into six words.  well done.  thanks.  

this was a ok piece, it was very humeris as well.

hi there,

i like the orginal and rhyme to it, but i don’t think your words die no matter how bad a writer is!!!...:)...later,jim

A bit pessimistic, no?  If your fingers are flying, why would your words die?  Your words are alive now, as i read them.  

how about, “my finger’s fly pisses out words?”  

give it some life, friend!  don’t let the words die!  

thanks.

This is good except for the word “my”.  Word fillers.  Without that word this will hit harder.  Now you have a problem, 2 more words are needed.  I challenge you to find those words to make this even more poignant.