Poetry / The Visit (Analysis)

I love this. It’s filled with emotion. Not only that of the messenger but how devastating the news would be to the receiver. The ending seems a bit to dull and simple compared with such a  emotionally dense beginning. Maybe a hint as to how he died would have made it more effective.

This gave me chills. This poem makes me feel deep emotion for the news bearer and reciever. It truely reminded me that there are so many americans fighting and so many of us have become numb and thoughtless about them. It hurts like a stag in the heart.

Not bad. I like the topic and the mood, but it seems quite simple and it’s not very thought provoking either.

This piece reached out and took my heart from word one.  The tender words of love and heartbreak.And how they can be cruel and unyelding. There’s times when we must diliver news that break our own heart as well as those whom we tell. Your work is one of sorrow and loss.  Worse yet Being a young man whom has just began life itself. A very moving piece. well done!!!Vickie

This is extremely powerful. You worked the rhyme scheme seamlessly into the work without degrading its potency. In my opinion, the rhyming actually did this much much better. Excellent job. This reminds me of something a military member might have to do. Not an easy job. Very vivid poem. Thanks.

terribly sad/I think the power would intensify if you traded the narrator’s pov with hers. JUst a thought….