Haiku/Senryu / Harvest Grains
Auburn cornfield,
Standing strong through Summer’s end,
Harvest grains abound
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Auburn just doesn’t seem like the right color. Having been raised in Indiana, I have a lot of cornfield experience, and I don’t think reddish brown is a natural color for it, esp. at the end of summer. If it is still standing strong, it should be light brown/tan or still green.
As a haiku, there is no ah-ha moment here, and not much of a deeper meaning either. Seems to me to be a pretty mundane observation. What are you trying to convey about Summer’s end and corn?
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