Lyrics / Four Letter

i really really enjoyed this one. talented thats for sure. i could even kind of hear the perfect music in my head as i read it. and it sounded good.

Very repetitive. Not my cup of tea, but it worked for Katy Perry.
I could imagine it stuck in my head all day. Good job ^_

I think i can grasp where you are trying to go with these lyrics but….too much….”too bad”.... watch for repetition you might want to try cleaning up and create a song structure (e.g. verse, chorus, etc) – Good luck!

Nice clear and to the point.  You wrote what you feel- successfully.

This piece is reminiscent of Bob Dylan’s “Love Is Just A Four Letter word.” It is important to be concise, and this one is. Question: Does the title promote the concise thought…Love? The third line, “I only wish this were a little more easy,” might the word easier replace the two words more easy? The first line of the fourth stanza, “How many times will it take to make you hate me,” confused me. Is the question being asked of the word “Love” or another person. (not mentioned) The reader/listener may become disinterested if pressed to work too hard extracting the meaning or story of the lyrics. I would like to see a repeated refrain or chorus to anchor the listener to the concise thought. I think this piece has the potential to be a very nice song which could be sung differently depending on who is singing it.

Thanks and keep writing.

~Carla

I think that your song had a really good flow and I really liked the meaning behind the song. Some people write songs and it really makes no sense, but yours actually does make sense and it would be a song that most people would be able to relate too.

I can feel what you are going for in this song. I like the idea of it I just think you can add some more to the song to get the feeling you want the listener to have and take from it. I am not sure “too bad” goes with the rest of the song. I feel you should take that part out and maybe add something in it’s place. In other words i feel it is a good start. With some brainstorming and revision could be powerfully conveyed to the audience about something many can relate.

From what I gathered the whole point of this song is about your overall lack of faith in love in general. I can empathize with that. To understand while reading it, it may need to be written more clearly. But sung, it probably sounds a lot better.

hi there,

yes…i agree with you…but as far as the song goes i would name it “to bad” as it’s repeated throughout the song..it sounds like a break up song without the herat…kinda cruel which id not a good thing..but something alot of people can relate to which in a strange way is a positive..hope i wasn’t to harsh but i’m sure you can do alot better…hope to read you again soon,,jim