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Romance / Grim Love Song
-Grim Love Song-
we marry when the time is right,
if that’s something your interested in,
maybe make a child.
New possibilities.
The fear,
not new,
nibbling away at me trying to replace this joyful knowing.
It’s telling me, ‘You were wrong
before about this stuff.
what is different?
Other than the interconnectedness of our stories…We came to the same idea at the same time in the most perfect time of our lives…
That moment when we expected it least.
And I think you just might feel the same way.
There is so much blue and green in the light;
I cry a little.
I keep on breathing in whatever is meant to happen.
We had magical, falling star moments on top of the world and then made love at the edge of the end of it.
Thank you for letting me rest in your neck nook, for the tenderness, for the slpifs, for your lips, hell, for your hips, for the tips of your finger-tickle tips.
the exhale of this inconceivable breath
is news that your path is leading you away from this. From me.. My heart will be in your suit case.
Truth is, if life is just a big classroom, this could just be exams.
’Don’t take life to seriously’
I have quoted you four times in conversation already and
now understand its legitimacy.
Maybe everything I just said backwards means nothing,
but it feels like it just might mean everything.
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cabrbooks reviewed Version 1 -
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SMRB reviewed Version 1 -
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This is very straight forward and also lets the reader in by sharing some of your intimacy ,(“Thank you for letting me rest in your neck nook, for the tenderness, for the slpifs, for your lips, hell, for your hips, for the tips of your finger-tickle tips”)although sadly.
“I have quoted you four times in conversation already and
now understand its legitimacy.”
The above line really delivers your dissapointment and in such an awakened way.I love it.
Although it is more of a love lost letter to a guy than a love letter to a guy,as you mentioned in your comments to reviewer.
Good Job!
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singularity reviewed Version 1 -
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This is very tender and the love seems very real. The humor captures lovers perfectly. My only beef with this piece is the word interconnectedness. Seems misplaced. The language is so fluid and tender, then, bam, this lawyer like speak clobbers you over the head. That word is horrific. I hate it. But other than than, a very charming glimpse.
thiscantbelife reviewed Version 1 -
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That was absolutely wonderful. I may be slightly biased because I am in love for the first time in many years, but your words described so much with so little… “Truth is, if life is just a big classroom, this could just be exams.” Classic! Love it love it!
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