Your comments are very kind. I’m glad my words were helpful.
Joel.
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I find the heights of reason to exist in the depths of soul. We are all, as one, and as individuals, collections of experiences and reflections spiraling through myriad points of commonality into, for each of us, our own singularity of consciousness. We think as one being, feel as one being, and suffer as one being, yet we do all of these in our own individual ways.
This is why I think that it is imperative that we hear what Christ meant when he told us to, “…love our neighbors…” For is it not in loving our neighbors, in loving the stranger in from the rain, that we learn to love ourselves? Isn’t it in my having been a stranger in the rain storm, alone and cold, that which makes me be, when I see the stranger, at once myself, warm and comfortable and be the stranger, cold and in need?
This is not to say that we should bare our throats to, “The wolf with the red roses.” Not at all. It is only to say that we, as one, know each other. We know the dark hand of the killer by having born the dark mind of the killer as we rage on the interstate when cut off. Thus when the stranger bears the dark hand, we know this too.
What I mean is that we should know the pain that we feel as the pain felt by the stranger, shared and common. And that we should greet the stranger honestly, without the excuse of the dark mind, not in ignorance of it.
It is in seeing the reflection of our kindness on the face of a stranger that we perceive kindness as a need, as a responsibility, and not as a handout.
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AmyWalker reviewed Version 2 -
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Wow this is very well done!
I applaud you for getting yout point across as well as expressing raw emotions very well throughout the whole piece.
There is a minor hiccup I want to bring to your attention ” Isn’t it in my having been a stranger in the rain storm,” this line here do you mean ” Isn’t it in me having been a stranger….” Just checking really and nit-picking at the sametime because for me thats the only downfall when I come across a piece that seems almost perfect is ruined by a minor typo I gotta point it out so yeah.
Anyways, I liked what you had to share so thanks,
Amy
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Geminirose reviewed Version 2 -
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It really made me think that even though we are different we are also the same in a sense. I always try to be independent and free. Also I am very critical of people. So you just made me remember that we are all people despite our differences and that I need to be more considerate of others. Thank you very much for writing your piece.
JacquelynDavis reviewed Version 2 -
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You proved a really good point. It goes along with the “Do unto others” saying. The first paragraph is my favorite. Keep writing.
Happy Writing
JD
Undone reviewed Version 2 -
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This makes absolute, perfect sense. It really makes me think. We are not that different at all. We are one in the same and if everyone thought in this fashion I feel personally the world would be a much different place.
Matthewtuckey reviewed Version 2 -
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Okay, I’m trying to stay awake after the first paragraph…
This is all very poetic. You have not put any of this into context. You should describe a common situation in today’s society that I, the reader, may find myself in. Then describe how the points you are vaguely discussing relates to this.
Otherwise it falls into the category of “poetic rambling”.
youngwriter92 reviewed Version 2 -
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I really like what you say, you make a lot of sense when you talk about things like that. i’d like to read some more of your items
sjvance reviewed Version 1 -
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I read the opening sentence several times, as it was a bit confusing. Maybe it is just the “s” on “exists”
We are all, as one, and as individuals, collections of experiences and reflections spiraling through myriad points of commonality into, for each of us, our own singularity of consciousness. - long and confusing
We think as one being, feel as one being, and suffer as one being, yet we do all of these in our own individual ways. - I love this line, very insightful
Isn’t it in my having been a stranger in the rain storm, alone and cold, that which makes me be, when I see the stranger, at once myself, warm and comfortable and be the stranger, cold and in need?
- way too long and confusing. some of this could be taken out to make more sense to the reader, but still get your point across
I like this. I think you go the long way around to tell your feelings and thoughts, but if that is your style then it works for you.
NathanD91 reviewed Version 1 -
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This is really good. I’ve never thought about things like this, and it actually makes sense. You took what Christ saiod to love our neighbors and put it in a way that everyone can make sense of it. Just one thing I would do is to at least make some of the words simpiler. I had no problem understanding them, but I’m sure other people will not. I normally don’t like reading these types of things but I think I could read yours over and over again. Great job.
There weren’t any grammer mistakes that I found, but I normally don’t pay any atention to it.
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