Haiku/Senryu / Confrontation (Analysis)

the long anticipated nemesis-I like it

all you need now is some scratchy seventies film, a midwestern voice over, and some kung fu prodigies that have been training in secret for months.

or are you on the debate team?

I like it. The defiance in the tone is definitely obvious, and is reminiscent of “old west” face-offs. I’m not sure if you purposely intended to ignore capitalization in the poem, but it’s a little bit distracting—I would suggest capitalization if the choice wasn’t purposeful.

I’m a little confused by your second criteria but this is almost a true haiku. A true Haiku has the five-seven-five patter(In which you have) and it also has twenty or seventeen (I can’t remeber which) words. You did a good job it makes me wonder what you are talking about. Good Job!