Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Of love and morality (Analysis)
Growing up, I was led to believe that you fall in love a couple of times until you find the one person you spend your whole life with.
Now, a year shy of the big 3-0, I have since evolved and have concluded that the above statement isn’t entirely true. Why? What has led me to change my tune, you ask?
My sister, D, has been married since 2003. She met and fell in love with R, a decent and equally brilliant Engineer in the summer of 2002. Obviously, it didn’t take long for them to know that they were meant for each other, and so decided to marry after only 8 months of dating. D had 2 relationships prior to R, both of whom weren’t noteworthy.
“It was as if time stood still when our eyes met.”, she tells me with twinkling eyes as she recounted the evening of their first meeting. The story’s often followed by a sigh coupled with the fluttering of her eyelids, while her right hand rested on her chest, lying inches above her heart.
I had every confidence their marriage would be a happy and lasting union up until a few days ago.
“Have I been blind all this time?”, she asked me. Of course, I had no clue as to what her question meant. Apparently, D had developed a crush on one of her co-workers, and, as having crushes go, seemed to be flirting with the idea of pursuing this attraction. To make matters a little worse, she claimed that her crush also shared the same feelings toward her. This troubled me deeply, knowing full well that this couldn’t possibly be my sister speaking. The person before me was a pod person masquerading as my sister, I thought. “Begone, devil spirit!”, I wanted to say.
What do you do? Scrap the vows of marriage and turn your back on all the beautiful memories, or look at the flip side and consider ignoring the possibility of having found the perfect partner as you whither away in a marriage?
It broke my heart to discover that marriage doesn’t make one impervious to falling in love with other people.
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It truly doesn’t. However when something isn’t broken don’t fix it. As well as don’t go for the bird in the bush when you have one in hand. You seem understanding seeing both sides.
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I think you could have said more on the subject. By that I mean you created an interest for the reader both in you, the blogger, and your sister. The last sentence is too brief and emotionaly unsatisfying for the reader. You did a good job of setting the circumstance, take a leap and let it out.
Concerning the writing, it was even and clear. The only bump I found was in paragraph 4 where you used the word “eyes” in dialogue and then immediately followed with a description of those same eyes in the next sentence. Repitition of the same word that close tends to trip the reader’s ear. A minor point, but one to watch for in general. Also, the 2nd to last paragraph is too long and probably should be two seperate sentences.
equally brilliant Engineer in the summer of 2002. - I would delete the “summer of 2002” part. It sounds like he was a brilliant engineer in the summer of 2002, not that they met then
Very insightful read. I wish love could be so profound and lasting too, but sometimes life gets in the way. Very good writing. I love the part “Begone, devil spirit” very funny.
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