Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Words of love. Words I cannot say. (Analysis)

I'm surprised at how easy it was for me to ignore you. I can't recall how long it has been. How I don't really see you in the mornings when you come in. How I really don't hear your voice when you talk to the rest of the group in the lunchroom.

Nevertheless, my heart still exists in June 2008. Though my eyes may have denied your spectre, my heart did gaze on your lithe frame, my ears registered your voice, your sigh.

Do you ever notice, dear? Or are you too caught up in your own life? How I long for the day when you reach out to me in madness, or whatever impassioned emotion holds you sway.

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September 29, 2008

KC_Leigh

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KC_Leigh reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

My heart strings were pulled when I read this. I completly feel the emotions going on within this piece. No major errors that I could pick up on. Great job!

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September 19, 2008

MisterP

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MisterP reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

Ah. How the other half love, or don’t as the case may be.
The emotion of the moment was very well encapsulated and you made me, as a reader, aware of your own shortcomings. A brave thing to do, well done.