Poetry / I've Lost Belief in Your Smile
Lets just be honest
you elude the situation
with familiarity
with a charming smile
[we're all smiling with you]
No one can conclude who you are
but I've come to
I've come into my own
Take a moment
lets just be honest
lets just be honest [for once
away from all others]
not everyone sees this side of you
You've been mistaken,
I've been mistaking
You weren't the one that chose
such a clean pose
but we're all happy
[aren't we?
aren't we?]
No one can hold a smile like you
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Just be honest.
You elude situations
with your charming smile.
I can’t conclude who you are,
but I’ve come into my own.
Just be honest.
For once away from others
let me see inside of you.
Weren’t you the one
who chose such a clean pose?
Are you happy?
No one can hold a smile like you.
Just be honest.
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