Poetry / Paths Passed In a Past Path

I’m done writing about the one that got away
Don’t want to think about things I never got to say
So I write them on a notepad, in crooked lines
To guide the thoughts we both had at different times
I might be thinking wishfully, but it’s not that hard to realize
That look you seem to give to me is like you’re speaking through your eyes
Every time your eyes meet mine, it seems we have to pause
And in that time, I’ve come to find, I feel a little lost
It’s happenstance our paths have crossed, but there are no second chances
I won’t build romance on drawn-out glances, first I need some answers

I took you for taken, stood back and held off flirtation
But please don’t mistake my actions for hesitation
Don’t want to be just a friend that talks you through your hard times
brought on by new boyfriends, while I walk along the sidelines
What would you want from me? Is it what I wanted too?
Would you be the one for me and am I the one for you?
One may be the loneliest number, but everyone competes to be it
Just a drop in a pond full of people; I make ripples that nobody sees yet
Don’t hook me up with your friends, when you know it’s you that I want
It wasn’t real? Keep pretending that you were just having some fun

I’ve got one eye open, but it doesn’t see much
I think that I’m hoping for something I can’t touch
Done writing about what could’ve been, so I’m just going to wait
Give my hands a rest, put down my pen and find some time to waste
You’re the girl of my dreams I haven’t dreamt of yet
In this world, it seems, the best comes when you’ve slept
I’ll sleep away the dream you made while living out your life
You think you thought, you know what’s not, now open up your eyes
 

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September 07, 2008

Amathine

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Amathine reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

Awesome! Usually not one for the standard AA BB pattern because it tends to sound simple, but! This flowed really nicely because beats per line matched up well, and doesn’t feel like you forced words to rhyme.
The content itself…I can relate to. Sitting around waiting for your chance, but never getting a shot, while the other person plays dumb -_-
Things haev a way of working out though!

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