Poetry / Bad Daddy (Analysis)

Despite the fact, come climb my tree, patronize me...
Can't believe, I produced your seed, piece of waste you are…
Without remorse, you feel none…your child cries for you…
Sight turns into blacks and grays…what else is to come…
This never-ending pain in my head…
I can't stand to see the sadness in her eyes…caused from you…
Why did you have to do this to her, I could understand me…
Her innocence speaks louder than any words…
Her face that of an artists best masterpiece…
The songs she sings, those looks I hate to see staring up at me…
I hope you suffer for your decisions, I hope the pain she feels comes back ten fold onto you…because its what I feel you deserve…
I hope the day doesn't come where she blames herself for your misfortune…because it's not her fault…you chose for her…
I try not to be that angry with you, telling myself you aren't worth it…
But I'm the one that has to see & hear what my child is going through because of it…
I know she's strong; she has more courage than you…
But it's so unfair what you're putting her through…
Her feelings are little…but she will still begin to hate you…
I hope one day you'll see…just what you decided to leave…

 

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l13dj13 avatar General Stranger

October 02, 2008

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its a very good peom. i like it and it touches the heart… but it doesnt read that easy. maybe you need to think about the way its structured…

thankyou

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