Quotes / your world punctured in the flash of a cape yet the strength of that wonder falls flat in the face of discomfort

I think as a stand alone quote this would fall dramatically short of most goals, its title is too much to be considered a six word, and without a definition, or breakdown about your subject no one will understand it. If your intending to write a book about MR Belmonte then perhaps you could find a home for this otherwise, its hard pressed to find a audience.
Gavinswar  

I like this quote, but I would have been really confused if you didn’t explain the bullfighting so as long as it is explained I think that it is pretty profound.

By itself, the quote doesn’t make much sense unless you’re familiar with Belmonte or you happen to have the introduction. Also, the impact of the 6-word story is lessened considerably by the incredibly long title.

I’d suggest making this more of a flash fiction piece rather than a 6-word story. Even just 50 words can make this feel more complete and meaningful.

What I get from this is that your life is characterized by somewhat flawed determination.  However, I think that if you feel it’s necessary to give so much explanation in order for the reader to be able to understand it, it just doesn’t work as a 6 word piece.

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September 23, 2008

by spiffy

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I suppose you are right, however it is not my fault that people don’t understand references. If people ever took the time to look up the things they did not know about, people would learn a lot of fascinating things. This shouldn’t be hindered by people’s ignorance, and so I explain what it is about beforehand, I don’t expect it to be added to that anthology anyway, and now you know about Juan Belmonte, arguably the most important Matador of all time, and learning is not so bad.

September 23, 2008

by metaphoricalsimile

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Here’s the thing though, if you’re writing in a public forum, then the writing is by default for others, not for your own edfication, so saying that it’s the readers responsibility to be aware of your writing is a bit egotistical.

September 23, 2008

by spiffy

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what is wrong with egotism? I pride myself in it.

September 24, 2008

by metaphoricalsimile

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You’re the one who applied a value judgment to being egotistical :)

September 24, 2008

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ah. haha

September 24, 2008

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I am a master debater :)

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“punctured” is a pickle of a word, and “in the flash of a cape” is obviously brilliant, but could be more brilliant if it was, “red cape”.