Poetry / Surprise!

Thanks for the review… its not a narrative piece about being involved in a specific activity, it is about the anxiety brought on by a life altering change--and that is why i chose not to write about what the protagonist is actually doing.  I dont think a description of what the protagonist is doing is necessary to a poem, anyway-- depending, of course, upon the poem itself.  
As for the nouns you called out, they are carefully chosen and are certainly not arbitrary, though perhaps the presence of many images could be overwhelming…. When i wrote it i thought that their connections were clear enough, but perhaps i could have made the meanings clearer?

How odd it is that your response is clear and unfragmented, clearly showing that you have the ability to write well, yet in your poem I can’t decide if corner or face, in the first line of your poem, are verbs. I have never seen hot water quake (or an apartment with hands, but I have seen one with a cradle) though I have seen it rise and fall with the tide, seen it evaporate in the summer sun, and have seen it boil violently. Thus in my mind, quaking is a stretch when coming from one who has the ability to communicate clearly. I just feel like it could be made more readable.

Surrealism in poetry means putting together words and images together that would not normally be juxtaposed, thus stretching the conventional meanings of the words. By stretching the meanings of the words and creating new angles on the words themselves, poetry is able to help language evolve.  

Some authors have argued that surrealist comparisons are a variation on metaphor, the meanings of the words revealing new aspects of one another by the contrast and the fresh comparison being formed (just as, in any situation, we understand by contrasts).  The key is not to make the juxtapositions too close, or too far apart.
I do put much thought into the juxtapositions i make.  These are not meant to be read literally, and judging by your response you seem to be more of a literal minded person.  
To think that water could quake is a personification of its qualities, it is fluid, it can shake violently, it can appear to be unstable.  My apartment’s hands are my own hands, suggesting that our homes are a part of ourselves in some very intimate ways. I didnt in this case really care to explain all those aspects, i didnt feel the need to, but maybe I should have.
I am unclear as to the confusion about corner and face, i see no indications that they may be verbs—corner is meant to be used as kind of an adjective about the face, because a) it is an angular face and b) it is a face that lingers in corners.  
I appreciate your feedback a lot and the opportunity to flesh this out.  I have received several positive critiques of this and as a result i am happy to hear from someone who doesnt like it.

It is not that I don’t like it; I just don’t understand it. I am not familiar at all with surrealist poetry. I am, however, familiar with sentence construction (though by no means an authority). ‘You corner face have gathered my skin cells in your pockets.’ While florid, this sentence is confusing. Perhaps making ‘corner face’ parenthetic by adding commas would make it read better. You, corner face, have gathered my skin cells in your pockets. But that is your call as the author. Unexpected hot water quakes in my apartment’s hands. This seems ok with your explaination of surrealist poetry. But the first time I read it, all I could think was:  ’huh?’. ‘The sun’s glass’ is hard to grasp: even with your explaination. I understand your position on expanding the english conventions to grow more prosperous in the next millennium, but I just wonder what we would have if Homer had written like that. But then again I did get a good mind work-out. Write on.

yeah, that would work. thanks.