Poetry / Distillation Feelings

Ah, obviously you think your poem is just fine the way it is.

You should put in your notes to reviewer that you are not interested in criticism. Also put there that you are not interested in becoming a better writer.

Your presumption that those are the reasons I gave your review a poor quality rating is naively arrogant.  You first stated the poem should be called “Oak and Amber” – To simply say it would be more compelling does not give a reason why.  Why would it be more compelling – because the assonance makes it catchy, because it fits the poem better, or simply because you think so?  Perhaps another reason?
Also, you said the “rhyminess” in the second part is forced.  Why and/or how so? Did it not occur to you that that part is suppose to feel forced to convey a feeling? Even if it wasn’t and/or you still don’t like it – give some logical reasons as to why.  Otherwise the reason for critique is pointless and becomes nothing more than a popularity contest.
As for the “it’s”  - yes it was in the incorrect form – thank you for pointing that out.
I always appreciate criticism, so long as it is intelligent and pertinent, not some capricious opinion.  As for becoming a better writer – well when any writer receives malnourished reviews – it is a little difficult.

Yep, I should have pointed those things out. You’re right. Or I should have simply skipped it.

Instead of giving my review a 0 quality rating, you should have asked for a refund. Or you should have asked me in the comments why I would have changed the title and why I thought the rhyminess was forced. Instead, I had to initiate this conversation.

I suggested changing the name of the poem to “Oak and Amber” because of exactly the reasons you pointed out. I assumed those reasons were clear, but maybe I should have gotten myself a few more credits to tell you the obvious.

The rhyminess of convey, sway, portray, etc. perhaps conveys a drunken joy or whatever to you; it sounds like a list of rhymed words to me that don’t really say anything. My criticism: throw out latinate words like convey and portray and go straight to more visual words. Sway is great. Even misery is OK, but why not use a word that screams misery without spelling it out.

In general I didn’t think your 11 lines were worth more than my skeletal review. Sorry. I should have skipped it. And maybe I deserved a 0 quality rating.

DC, You can’t please all the people all the time, as the saying goes…and only some of the people some of the time, and perhaps some people none of the time unless you lie to them and don’t speak your truth. Dishonesty is such a sellout. Hang in there!

why did you too give me a negative rating for some odd reason? i find that harsh and unnecessary. The title Distillation of Feeling was unfounded within the poem and the two of began a dialogue, as did we. What went sour? You confuse me. WW

I gave your review a 100% quality rating. That’s why it reads 50% now. She bitchslapped you with the 0%. Don’t be confused. I liked your review.

Oh thank you, sorry, was just not thinking right, of course you are correct….this whole critiquing and response thing makes me nuts at times. You try to do your best and be honest and thoughtful and people just seem to want to hear nothing but slap five praise for whatever they write here. As if there were no standards in poetry. Thanks again, WW.

Yes, but Solenoid had a point. I didn’t give the best review I could have given. I have no problem with someone asking me to be more specific, challenging me to give a better review. She should have done this.

guess you didn’t like the review, the poem is too enigmatic as it stands to convey anything succinct. if you’re looking for gushy praise, i see no one else has taken the time to review this piece which i thought had potential but it seems you don’t wish to hear honest critiques, just fatuous comments.

Good review, Willow_Wren. :)

Thanks, DC! :)

I just wrote another worthless review. She called me naively arrogant. She just bitch-slapped me. ::licks wound::  I’m sure you’ll enjoy it. Up there ^.

I gave your review a 100% quality rating. That’s why it reads 50% now. She bitchslapped you with the 0%. Don’t be confused. I liked your review.