Screenplay / So this is Christmas (Analysis)

So This Is Christmas

 

By
M.R. Merris


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for
John Lennon
and
Art Bell

 

 

So this is Christmas
And what have you done
Another year over
A new one just begun
And so this is Christmas
I hope you have fun
The near and the dear ones
The old and the young

A merry merry Christmas
And a happy New Year
Let's hope it's a good one
Without any fear

And so happy Christmas
For weak and for strong
The rich and the poor ones
The road is so long
So happy Christmas
For black and for white
For yellow and red ones
Let's stop all the fight

A merry merry Christmas
And a happy New Year
Let's hope it's a good one
Without any fear

And so this is Christmas
And what have we done
Another year over
And a new one just begun
And so this is Christmas
We hope you have fun
The near and the dear ones
The old and the young

A merry merry Christmas
And a happy New Year
Let's hope it's a good one
Without any fear
War is over, if you want it
War is over now

Merry Christmas
John Lennon

Credits.

INTERIOR Night Radio Station (early 90’s).
JEFF CHRISTAIN in his office at a radio station on the phone arguing with his wife. We see his posters are on the wall, there are clippings about him in Newsweek, Time and Variety on his desk. It is before his shift.
Boss
Jeff get your ass in the studio. You got three minutes

Jeff
(Cupping the phone’s receiver) Fuck you x (station manager) my show’s syndication made the network a shit pile of money and bought you your fucking house.

Boss
(stares blankly in humiliations and closes the door.)

Jeff
(to Jeff’s wife) listens why you don’t go to your mother and takes the kids. I will join you tomorrow and we can talk about this later

Jeff’s Wife
(VO)
No Jeff. This is it. I am taking the kids and going to See Mom and Dad. I will have a restraining order taken out against you the day after tomorrow.

Jeff
Tomorrow is fucking Christmas you fuckin’ cunt! I want to see my kids..

Jeff’s Wife
Cut to:
INTERIOR NIGHT JEFF’S HOME: Jeff’s wife on the phone with Jeff Christian. She has a black eye, bruises and cuts on Her face and arm. Obviously she has been a victim of a beating.

You will never see them ever again. They are not safe with an animal like you. I should have left your ass years ago.

(slams the phone down and goes out to the car. Kids are in the back asleep. She drives along a rural road towards town the car rounds a bend and we see a bright white light on the other side of the bend. The camera pans up to see the light is coming from a UFO (Saucer). The car stops suddenly when the light hit it. The wife frantically tries to get it going. The kids wake and begin to scream.

Cut to:
Jeff slams the phone down, composes himself and runs out the door just in time to hear the last chorus of his theme song, John Lennon’s “All I Want is the Truth."

Cut to:
Station later on: Jeff is on the air

Jeff
Well I bought the old lady and ultimate liberal tank, a new Volvo station wagon with the vanity plate Mrs. King Jeff. She got so pissed she could puke snake venom. I know she loved it. In 20 years of putting up with my ass she hasn’t had it so good.

Jeff’s producer sends him a note on his computer:

Call on line 1 about your wife and kids.

Jeff
Ken just informed me that I have a call about the old lady. Caller your are on the, Jeff Christian show. What is this about my wife and kids?

Cut to: side of a rig watching a car burn. POV of the caller
Caller
I saw a saucer beam a lady with two small kids from a baby blue Volvo with a new baby blue Volvo station .
MsKingJeff.


We see the Volvo stations wagon empty, see the license plate Ms. KINGJEFF. We hear a sire the background.

Rewrite the below to show the action.
11/26/2008
8:04 PM
Starbucks
Military way
Benicia

 

 

Cut to:
Jeff remains professional and ends the call. He signals for bumper music and then goes into the same office we saw him before and calls a buddy in the county sheriff's office and ask if they have had any reports about a burning car. The officer said yes, and he names the road that the Jeff’s wife is on. Jeff knows in his gut that it was his wife. He hangs up the phone, puts on his coat and leaves his office. He goes back to the studio and in hand signals tells the producer to go into his theme song. He goes to the puts his headphones on and waits for a couple of bars of the song. He then signal to stop the theme song and says," this is the last time I will be on the air, thank you." He takes the headphones off, unjacks them and walks out of the studio into a snow filled parking lot and gets into his pickup and drives off.

Credits


Background Images
Camera pans news papers and the same news magazine 10 years old about Jeff. They tell of his sudden departure from the air. A sudden gust of wind blows those papers and mags off to the floor. The camera focuses on the desk chair and a single magazine with a current date opened up to paper clipped article about Jeff. The headline is,” What Happened to Jeff Christian."
Cuts to Blackness
12/22
Story Time

SCENE I

Intruder POV: Night outside of a farmhouse in the winter In Western Montana. We hear the intruder breathing.

Cut to:
The master bedroom: a alarm panel imbedded into the side of the nightstand starts to blink then buzzes. A sleeping middle age man is startled awake by it. He checks the panel and is shocked by what he sees on it. He resets the alarm and it still buzzes. He studies the panel to determine what zone the intruder is in. He reaches in the night stands drawer and removes a 9 MM pistol and slams clip into it. He reaches underneath his bed and pulls out a bulletproof vest and a helmet equipped with pair of night vision glasses and tinted visor. He slips into a pair of black pants and boots that are laid on a chair. He goes to laptop on top of his bureau next to the door and hits a key. Takes a deep breath and opens the door quietly and sneaks out onto the hall.

Cut to:
Intruder POV: He is near the front porch and is searching for alarms or booby-traps and finds none. He clicks a switch near his throat and we hear a silence and then a double click in his earpiece. This is his order to move in for the kill. He takes out his weapon, a silencer on a 9MM, slips a key into the front door, opens it quietly and walks into the house.

Cut to:
Owner's POV. He glances in mirror that hangs directly in front of the stairs leading down to the first floor and sees the intruder in it. The owner crouches down and waits until the intruder is in the house and has closed the door. The owner withdraws a remote control device from a side pocket of his fatigues depresses a button and a red led comes on, he returns the remote to the pants pocket and slides the safety off his gun and crawls around corner. He sees the intruder in the mirror at the foot of the stairs. Th owner is crouched behind solid wood banister at the top of the stairs. We hear him take a deep breath, checks the mirror to see where the intruder is. He slides the visor down over his night goggles. Takes hold of the gun with both hands depresses a button on the side of the gun and jumps up as a blinding spot light comes barrels into the intruder’s eyes.


Owner
Hold it.


Blinded by the light the intruder flops on the floor and shoots the light out and rolls to his right toward the living room and to his surprise finds the doors closed and locked. The owner shoots the intruder twice in the knees while he is checking the lock on the living room door. The intruder drops to his knees and clicks throat-clicker four times.

Cut to:
A Jeep Wagoner parked on a country road. The farmhouse is in the background. In the back seat are two men dressed in black like the Intruder. In the front passenger seat is a man in jeans, button down blue arrow shirt and a dark green cloth coat. He has a headphone on and hears the intruder’s four clicks as well as the men in the back seat. Surprised appears on his face briefly before control takes command.

Cut to:
The intruder is at the living room holsters his 9-MM and swings out his silenced Uzi, sprays the banister area and drags himself to the door finds to find it locked. The owner takes shelter behind the wood veneer metal banister. The intruder attempts to open the door and finds it locked. He tries to shoot the lock open and finds the bullets bounce off the door. He lies on the floor with his back to the door and hits his throat clicker five times begins to empty his gun at the banister.

Cut to:
The leader is about to turn and give order to retrieve the intruder when he hears a pick up truck racing toward the farm house followed by a police car with lights and sirens on. He evaluates the situation while the men in the back seat grow tense with anticipation of being sent out. The realization that they won’t be able to save their comrade creeps into the face of all of them. Finally the man in the passenger seat clicks his clicker five times and pulls off his head seat and motions to the driver to drive on.

cut to: inside the farm house: the intruder hears the five clicks. He clicks six and puts the gun into his mouth and kills himself. The owner grimaces at the sight of the man killing himself. He hears the siren and begins to struggle down the stairs. While going down the stairs he reaches for a remote down the stairs he reaches for the remote control in his pants pocket and clicks it twice. While he goes toward the body he activates a voice-activated tape recorder from a microphone attached to his vest and begins to take verbal notes. He removes his latex gloves, scissors and a vial from various pockets in his vest none. He looks for distinguishing marks and id finds none. He then takes off the man’s night-goggles and clips a lock of the man's hair and gets finger prints He then removes a tape measure and a camera and lays the tape measure next to the man and begins to document the intruder appearance and the gear. While all this is going on he is talking into the tape recorder making notes on the man’s ethnic origins, weight, height build etc. He also identifies the ammo, gear and the lack of serial numbers. After this he stumbles over to the to the staircase slides open a panel and drops the hair sample, camera, fingerprints and all tools plus his gloves into the compartment. We hear the items falling and hitting a metal plate. The owner looks down into the area and turns on a switch. We hear what sounds like an electric train on a track. He puts the panel in place and goes to the stairs and waits for the police.

cut to:
Outside of the farm house. the state police arrives allowed by the pick up truck. We hear the cop and the driver greet each other like they know each other for a long time. The driver in the pick up truck is younger than the cop and stays in the cab taking notes. We see him checking his watch for the time. Also we hear a police scanner calling for back up and we see a tape recorder attached to the scanner. After the cop goes inside the young man gets out of the car and beings to take pictures of the outside of the house. Especially of the footprints in the snow cut to: Inside the house: The cop is looking at the body looks around, he looks at the owner

COP
Finally got one Jeff.

Jeff
He reaches into his pants and pulls out a tiny tape recorder and turns it on. Says the date and time and then raises his eyes to the officer

Can you please repeat your question officer Smith.

Frank
(frustrated)

What happened Mr. Houston?

Jeff
I heard a disturbance down stairs going on I found a man in my house and I told him to stop. He shot at me and
I returned fire striking him in both knees. Before I could disarm him he killed himself.

Frank
Is that the way happened.

Jeff
Yeah it is.

Frank
Your gun please.

Jeff
He stands and gives his fire arm to the police.

Frank
This yours?

Jeff
You know damn well it's mine and you know I have a permit.

Frank
Just making sure, for the sake of the record.
(He points to the tape recorder walks over the body and picks up the intruders gun with a pen, looks at it and smiles.)

xxxxx civilian version.


Jeff
And ten to one the serial numbers are filed off or it was stolen a week ago from two-bit pawnshop in. Denver.

Frank
Did you check for serial numbers?

Jeff
Officer I would not think of disturbing the crime scene

Frank

(pissed)
Jeff turn that damn tape recorder off for a friggin second.

Jeff
(turns the tape recorder off)
OK you got three minutes. But your better be willing to repeat everything you are going to say in That was 30 years ago Jeff! Leave them alone? They killed Maggie and the boys. They are going to kill you. And they will find you and I won't be around to cover your stinking ass.

Frank
Damn it Jeff I am not the enemy. I have known you all my life so don't give me any shit. This guy is a pro and you and I know it. And you know we are going to find jack shit on him or if we do it is going to be all lies and bull. You have made my life a living shit pile ever since you moved back to the ranch after your folks died with all this UFO conspiracy crap. You just won't shut up about what happened will you, you won't leave well enough alone will you.

Jeff
Will you forget Frank? You saw them too.


Jeff
Glares at Frank then softens
Sometimes I wish you weren't Frank. It might make this easier...

(He glances at this watch and turns the tape recorder back on. He mumbles the time and date into the recorder.)

Is that all officer?

Frank
Yes it is. You better come with me, we need
a statement. Jimmy is out in the truck he can wait until the crime lab folks get here. (sarcastically)Did you call the head of your fan club, Bill Paxton

Jeff
No, Jimmy can from the truck. Gene probably got my page. I will check with Jimmy on the way out.


Frank
Grab your coat. I got coffee in the car. It's going to be a long night.

Jeff
(Walking around the body)
Just like old times Frank.

Frank
(walking out onto the porch)
Jeff, shut up.. please... Lily wanted me go Christmas shopping with her in the morning. God she is going to be pissed.


Jeff
(Nodding to Jimmy as he walks down the stairs.)
Just tell her you are with me talking about the old days.



Frank
Then she would be really pissed.(to Jimmy) would you look after the place until the crime lab gets here. And please don't go in. I will throw you in jail for disturbing an investigation. I promise you will fist crack after they are finished.

Jimmy
Anything you say Frank

Jimmy gets back in the truck after taking a couple of pictures of Frank and Jeff.Frank and Jeff gets into the car and drive away, Jim waits until he hears Frank telling dispatch to send the crime lab out. When he hears that he drives back down the driveway and out onto the road until he gets to Jeff’s barn he walks carefully in the snow until gets to the barn and goes in. He disappears for a couple of minutes and come back out with a clear plastic bag and two DVD. He clears his tracks in the snow and drives back up to the house to wait for the crime lab.

cut to: wide shot of the house as the crime lab techs arrive.


FADE OUT
FADE IN

SCENE II
12/22
Two men walking. One bodyguard is leading and one is behind Two well-dressed older men in different shades of black cashmere great coats walk slowly in-between the two bodyguards. There is a light snow on the ground It is cold, we see the men's breath as they discuss matters in hushed somber tones. No else is around.

Man
...the reason I brought you out in the cold George is that we have a problem. It seems the operation in Montana is a failure and we couldn’t limit the exposure.


George
.... Jesus Christ...any loose ends?


Man
Nothing that we can't handle.

George
How did it happen. We sent in our best team. They always succeed...


Man
interrupting
...and will continue to succeed. We just need to try it again.

George
Surprised interrupting
...another mission?.

Man
yes.. this time a little less opaque and more visceral.

George

(stopping and looking him right in the eye)

Harry, what in the hell are you talking about.

Harry
Laughing. He takes George's elbow and they begin to walk.

Our New York friends can call in some favors that have with their business partners in Seattle in exchange for lessening charges against a certain elderly gentlemen.


George
Exasperated
Not that scumbag.


Harry
Laughing
George, without that scumbag we wouldn't be here today.

Harry stops and begins to talk to George’s back as he walks ahead.

and you wouldn't be using the tax payers money to buy presents for that page you bugger. Tony is it?

George
Once he hears the name Tony, his back clenches then his shoulders drop and he slowly turns around.

Mary knows...

Harry
...and also some of your staff. We know that. And that you were planning to retire after this session and move to France.

George
... Tony hasn't seen Paris, he has so little time.

Harry
..Before….What is it George a year maybe two?

George
..but the cocktails, the new drugs.
 

Harry
will help only so much. In the end you will loose him and everything if you….

George
don’t play ball.

Harry
Yes George unless you play ball with us. Once you retire a certain pharmaceutical company whose chairman of the board is looking for an able successor will retire and they will offer you the job. And they will offer free drugs for their board members. I also hear that they offer first crack at the new drugs to their board.


George
..and this company would be the one who manufacture the drugs that could help Tony.

Harry
yes George and they pay very well. Mary could keep her house and you could go Paris to write your memoirs and help Tony find some happiness in his last days.

George
And this company also has kept HIV drugs cost so high the only a wealthy few in the world can afford them. I have chaired and sat on committees that have castigated this very company. And you expect me to take a job as a the chairman of the board from this very same company and by accepting this job cast doubt on my work in the Senate for the last twenty years all because one man is dying? I love him and I don’t want to hurt Mary or the kids with all the publicity, but even love must have limitation. I swore to my constituents to do what is right and in their best interest and I have done that.

Harry
Interrupting George
Except in certain areas.

Both men stop and look into each other’s eyes

George
Flustered
Of course there have to be certain comprises to get the whole of my agenda accomplished. Yes, I have made packs with the Devil and I am not proud of that. But the comprises were for little things and in some cases, one could argue the compromises could be justified for the sake of National Security.

Harry
looking at George with disdain

You helped give the country over to the Jews, and niggers just like your father. You allowed the Vietnamese into the country, knowing damn well that you couldn’t trust them. You supported bilingual education, the wet backs didn’t even want to learn English! They just wanted to bleed this country dry and go back to wet back heaven! The faithful in Hollywood and the Upper East side loved you. Mary lunched with Babbs and Goldie and you played golf with Jack and Warren! The dumb pigs never knew that during all your pontification and sainthood you were doing my bidding.

George
(with equal bitterness)

..i remember that day that day that you came into my office on the hill. I hadn’t seen you since Vietnam, though I had rumors. I had just gotten off the phone from with senator xxxxx telling me that I got my seat on the Senate Intelligence oversight committee when my secretary announced you. I was anxious when I saw you and noticed that you had changed. When you threw a copy of the report on my desk and gave me your card I knew something evil was happening. I never knew that you had been working with your father and or so long them while we were in Vietnam and that they were in so deep. Go on about the communist, God man they were in on everything! Dallas, Memphis even the FBI. They knew Hoover’s dress size! That scared me to death, but was nothing compared to when the report talked about the crash in Poland in 1939, about the Foo Fighters and Roswell and the other crashes and the meeting that the grays had with Ike in 1954, Majic-12, Area 51 and the abductions and mutilations. It just went on and on. You guys buffaloed everybody until Jeff Christian stumbled onto the truth and you guys had to silence him in a way that never could be traced to you. You had your “friends from the southern skies” kidnap Christian’s wife and kids after they tampered with the car. You made sure that three or four people saw as the ship lift the Christian’s wife and kids from the car.
That was five years ago and he has been kept his mouth shut since. Just recently a new set of visitors wanted to talk to all of us not just you or Majic 12, but all of us and you couldn’t let that happened. Because if that happened then your dreams of the thousand year Reich would be gone. Because the new set of visitors wanted to teach us how to take care of this planet and how to travel to the stars. Imagine no more poverty, pollution disease or hunger. Everybody would have everything they need. Everybody, no mater nigger Jew spic faggot or democrat. And what scared you the worst was the fact that the new visitors demanded going straight to the people not to the UN, the Majic 12 or to any government, just to the people. You said that humanity could not understand them, and they said that they would make us understand. You said that it would be chaos and they said that there would be chaos if they didn’t talk to us.
When they said that they wanted Jeff Christian to meet them and help explain what they were about to the world you said he must die, so you could have your thousand year Reich.

Harry
And you bought off on every bit of it. You sodomite pig! And you will continue to do as you are told or Tony will die and Mary will die and your children and grandchildren will die, but before they die they will learn that their husband and father and grandfather willing helped build the thousand year Reich. Though they may hate the Reich but they will to learn to thank us when the white Christian people will once again rule the world and all others will be licking our boot heels like the Jew pigs in Auschwitz did.

George
bitter
Harry, for a supposedly Christian you are a vile man.

Harry
with distaste
George at least I am not a Sodomite.
stopping and looking him in the eye
Do we have a deal?

George
Yes we do and this is the last time we will meet. I don't care what you do. You have my signoff on anything you want. I will resign at noon on Christmas Eve because of ill health. Is that enough time?

Harry
Plenty. Have a nice night Senator.

George
May you rot in hell.

Harry
then I will save you a table....or a bed for you and your young whore. Gute Nacht! (Good night in German)

Scene III
12/22
Cut to:
The senator and the two security men walk off. Harry walks toward the street to a parked car. A young white man with a shaved head and dressed in a black suit with an earphone jumps out and opens the door for Harry. Harry gets into the car with a slight nod of thanks to young man. The young man looks around to see who is around and gets into the car next to Harry. The car pulls away and merges into the traffic

Interior of the Harry’s car:
Harry looks smug and angry as he looks out the window for a moment and ponders the Christmas decorations. He then turns his head toward the young man who is sitting very rigid and alert. Once Harry turns his head the young man bends his head toward Harry

Harry
(in a low voice)
It is time for the Senator to go
to Valhalla.

Young Man
When should I arrange his departure?

Harry
I think Christmas Eve. I think we need to give ourselves a present. One less piece of trash is good way to honor the birth of our savior.

Young Man
That is in a week!

Harry
Is that a problem?

Young Man
in German
Wird besorgt! (“No, Will do!” in German).

Harry
Dankeschön (in German thank you)


FADE OUT

 

 

 

 

 

FADE IN

Scene IV
12/22
EXTERIOR NIGHT SHOT OF PHONE BOOTH. We see one of the senator’s security guards talking to someone on the phone.

Security Guard

It will be their New York friends. Colleagues of the one that is in jail. Is that clear.?


Voice on the phone
Calm deep male
Yes. Payment in the usual way?

Guard
Yes.

Voice
Merry Christmas

Guard
Merry Christmas
Hangs up the phone and walks out the booth.

FADE OUT

FADE IN
Scene V
12/23
EXTERIOR SHOT WIDE: ASSAIN POV: THROUGH A RIFLE’S SCOPE. Morning at Jeff’s farm. Everything is quiet and serene. We see an old pickup truck pull up and Jeff gets out with some groceries. He goes to the door and puts the bag down. He gets out his remote control and pushes a button, nothing happens. He feels the inside the door jamb and finds something he backs up
A couple of steps and then the door explode outward. He picks himself off the snow and goes toward the truck. He looks at the truck a realizes that the truck could be next. He runs like Hell towards the barn. We hear a clicks and the truck explodes throwing Jeff face first in the snow. We hear Jimmy’s pickup truck speeding toward the house from the dirt road. We see him get Jeff into the truck and drive away. We hear him getting on his CW asking for assistance from the police. We hear the sheriff mutter, “Shit.”

FADE OUT

FADE IN

Scene VI
12/23

INTERRIOR OF JEFF’S HOSIPTAL ROOM: Jeff is lying in a hospital bed. Jeff is bandaged and sleeping. Jimmy is sitting next to him on and sleeping on cot with a policeman sitting in a chair reading a magazine next to him. The door opens and four men walk in by a woman with a picnic basket. The police officer rises and knows and nods hellos to all. Jimmy wakes up startled as one of the men goes over to calm him down. The other man goes to the window and looks out. He waves to someone in the street and one on the building. He pulls out a walkie talkie and conducts a radio check with the man in the street and on the building. The woman goes to Jeff and checks his dressing and. One of the menthe foot of the bed and begins to read it. He mentions some meds to the woman and she nods. A nurse walks in and startled the woman who is tending Jeff and begins to talk to her.

Woman
Good morning Peggy

Nurse
Martha Graham you know that visiting hours are over.

Martha
(stroking the sheets)
Pete is still putting too much starch in the
sheets and Jeff needs another blanket. You
still got cots on the floor?

Nurse.
(flustered)
Yes we do. Are you attending to spend the night?

Martha
Until he is ready to go home. (taking a microwave tub of soup from her basket.) Is the microwave still working.

Nurse
Yes it is.

Martha
(glancing at her watch)

Time for Guiding light. Oh Peggy. This is Doctor Bill Ellis, from Seattle. He will be Jeff’s doctor.

Nurse
Turning toward Doctor Ellis.
Nice to meet you doctor. (shaking his hand). You will need to check in with our director. Bill Dixon. Please follow me.
(speaks to the man who is looking out the window)Forgot your manners Bill Paxton.

Bill
Hi Peggy, how’s Larry and the kids.

Nurse
He is still laziest man I ever met. The kids are good. Are the boys coming down for Christmas?

Bill
Eric is, Jim got a tournament.

Peggy
Still wrestling at 165

Bill
No he is up to 175. He was too getting too thin.


Peggy
How’s Dorothy

Bill
Sullen

Got a new boyfriend.

Peggy
Oh…hopefully better than the last piece of trailer trash she picked up. I don’t know why she left you Bill, you two were good together.

Bill
(still looking out the window)

…were.

Peggy
(aware of Bill’s tender feelings)

Tell Eric stop on by, when he comes to town. Cathy is still crazy about him. (Turning toward Doctor Ellis) This way doctor. (Walks out the door followed by Doctor Ellis).

The rest of the people in the room are uncomfortable with the scene. Bill continues to stare out the window while the other man pulls up a chair next to Jimmy and they begin to talk. Martha walks in and pulls out a thermos of coffee from the picnic basket and begins to pour coffee for everybody. Every one settles down when Jeff begins to stir. Martha puts the thermos down and goes to Jeff and comforts him as he comes to.

Martha
Jeff can you hear me, it is Martha Graham.

Jeff
(weakly)
The dancer.. Am I in heaven?

Martha
No, you fool, you are not. You are in St Lukes. How do you feel?

Jeff
Like I have been kicked by a mule with a hangover… God my head hurts.
(Attempts to sit up)

Martha
(forcing him back down)
Lie still you got a pretty good concussion.

Jeff
(flops back down and grimaces with pain upon impact)

Martha
And broke a couple of ribs.
BILL PAXTON rises from the window and goes to Jeff’s
bedside
Bill Paxton
Jeff its Bill Paxton. I got Doc Ellis and some of the boys to keep you company.

Jeff
Thanks what happened?

Bill
Explosion took the door and the front porch out. They had your truck rigged to blow with a remote. It looks professional.

Jeff
Military?

Bill Paxton
No Jeff, it wasn’t military or anything that the intelligence boys would use. As best as I can tell, it looks alike a mob hit. I have some calls in to confirm who would use them.

Jeff
Jesus the mob. They are going on that shit trail again. God I need a drink, where is Jimmy.

Jimmy
Right here Jeff.


Martha
(to Jimmy)

Don’t you dare give him any whiskey. It is going to counteract his meds. Anyway he could use some drying out, he hasn’t been sober this long since Maggie disappeared.

(Jeff winces when she mentions Maggie.)

Sorry Jeff.

Jeff
It’s ok Martha. You are right. A little sobering up is what I need. Jimmy did you get all the stuff.

Jimmy
Yes I did.

Jeff
Did you make the copies.

Bill
Yes he did and I have a copy and so does Sandler Broadcasting. I confirmed that they received it and it is locked up in safety deposit box.

Jeff
(full of self pity)
Good. If they get me at least someone will hear the truth. Someone wouldn’t think Jeff Houston is a loony.

Bill
We all know you are telling the truth.

Jeff
The truth is not worth goat shit. Nobody cares, they all want their, 51 inch TV, SUV, DSL, digital cable so that they can watch fucking star trek in 16 languages including fuckin’ pig Latin. Nobody cares.

Bill
We do.

Jeff
I know, I know. But sometimes it is not good enough

FADEOUT

FADEIN

Scene VII

12/23

INTERRIOR INSIDE OF HARRY’S OFFICE IN WASINGTON DC FROM HARYY’S POV that AFTERNOON.
Harry
Hello

Voice
(In a thick NYC accent)
It wasn’t done.

Harry
I heard. Are you going to try again?

Voice
Do I have any choice?

Harry
No. If you want to see your employer on Christmas Eve, solve my problem in Montana before then.

Voice
Yeah..yeah we will be in touch…

Harry drums his well manicured hands on desk mat and swings his chair around, stands and looks out onto the Washington Monument. He stares as if deep in thought. He then reaches into his jacket breast pocket and pulls out a cell phone dials in a number waits until the number he is calling answers. Harry puts the phone back into his breast pocket and returns to gaze out onto the Washington monument.

FADE OUT

FADE IN

 


SCENE VIII
12/23

HARRY’S OFFICE AT MIDNIGHT. He is sitting down in a chair in front of a fire flicking a cigarette butt into a fire. A German opera is playing in the background. A Classic Gray EBE appears in front of the couch. He smiles and tries to stand and can’t. The gray has somehow mentally disabled him. HARRY realizes it and relaxes in the chair.

Harry
(friendly)
Hello old friend.

EBE
(Doesn’t acknowledge the warmth of Harry’s greeting.)
You asked to see us.

Harry
Yes, it’s about Jeff Christian. You know we have tried twice and failed. I think it is appropriate to ask for your help in killing Mr. Christian.

EBE
You know that is impossible. I have hidden our meetings and communications from the others. This meeting is a minor infraction against our law of non interference. If I intentional harm another sentient being, besides in acts of self-defense, it is a crime of the highest order which means a permanent loss of my freedom for myself and my colleagues. I won’t do it.

Harry
(Exasperated)
I know…I know.. your laws. What about you use your craft as a diversion while allowing one of our craft in doing the actual damage.

EBE
That is a defensible position in our system of laws.


Harry
Good. I need to create a plan and get our sources together. Can you meet me here tomorrow and I will give you the details then.
EBE
I don’t know why you just tell us now. We both know that you have the plans made and all the details worked out as we speak.

Harry
(surprised)
How did you know?

EBE
(sarcastically)
We have eyes and friends everywhere, even looking at you old friend. We will see you at your base.

EBE Disappears. Harry rises from the couch and goes to his suit jack which is draped over the back of his chair and draws out a phone form his breast pocket he dials a number.

FADE OUT

FADE IN
Scene IX
12/24

SCENE: Inside a conference room at Area 51 around a large table sits Harry and the hit team, a couple of US Air Force pilots in jump suits and an Air Force three star General. They all are intensely studying a slim 8x11 document except Harry. The Air Force pilots have disbelief growing in their faces while the jaws tighten the further they read into the document. While the team’s CO is getting madder and madder with each page he reads.
A door opens and through the door we see a armed Air Force Security Guard opening the door for two EBEs (classic “Grays”). They step out into the room and walk toward the table. Everybody rises as the EBE’s take positions next to the General who is at the head of the table, then the humans sit down leaving the Grays standing. Harry is sitting across from the Grays and he smiles and the EBE’s nod acknowledgement in his direction, then in turn nod acknowledgement to the general and then to all who are in attendance.

General
Let’s start. There is no need for introductions I was ordered to take command of this op by the Joint Chief’s of Staff with bye-off from the NSC and CIA. There will be no written or verbal communication about what is said around this table, the mission or any debriefings. Any questions from any outside sources whether military or civilian about this mission will refer to the Joint Chief. Any man not found in compliance will be court marital for violating a direct order and will be found guilty… and gentleman (looking around) will rot in prison for the rest of their lives. Even if I have to stand guard duty. Do I make my self-clear (looks around again).

General
Good. Any questions?

XO
Does the President know of this action?

General
(does not respond and looks sternly right into X0’s eyes)
Do you wish to step down Lt.?

Lt.
(looks into the General’s eyes with intensity) No sir.
 

General
(fatherly)
Then let me give you one bit advice..One more question like that, in your line of work Lt. and you won’t make Commander, even if God wrote your evals. Do I make myself clear Lt?

LT.

(through clenched jaw)
Yes sir.

General
(smiles)
For sake of time I will quickly run through the mission. We depart from here at midnight and will rendezvous 15 mile from St Lukes with our friends’ craft at 00:30 hours. At which time they will…

EBE
There has been a change of plans.

General
(turns toward the EBE)
OK. What is it?

EBE
Our sources within the Community informs us that The Community is contacting Jef Christian as we speak and is telling him of the plans to reveal The Community’ to Earth this Christmas Eve and that they need his helps as a spokesperson and. They need his help so much that without him they fear that the Revelation won’t go just right and that beings will get hurt on both sides. They also are telling him of our plans of stopping the Revelation by killing him.

General
What!

Harry
(in German)
Shit

Capt. Jackson
Jesus fucking Christ

EBE
Most unfortunate for us. We believe that there is one among you that is what you call a mole. But to know whom or how the Community learned of our plans is not useful here. We need a plan to stop the Revelation and we need it quickly.

Chief
No shit Sherlock.

Capt. Jackson
Daniels!

Chief Daniels
(pushes away for the table in frustration)
Aye Aye sir.
General
(frustrated)
If we scramble we can be at the target in a hour? Is that correct Capt. Jackson?

Capt. Jackson
Yes Sir.

General
When can you leave Capt. Jackson?
 

Capt. Jackson
In 20 minutes

General
(to the EBE)
Can you leave now?

EBE
(voice over)
Yes


General
(to the EBE)
Does The Community plan to abduct Jeff Christian and keep him until the Revelation?


EBE
(to the table_
No. If they do that they fear the Earth will think we have manipulated him. The Community wants the appearance of an independent friend. No, someone that is not controlled by them.

General
(to the table)
Can anyone see why not we scramble
and do it now?

Captain Jackson
There will be no kill team. Our saucer only holds room for 2 pilots plus an observer. The saucer doesn’t carry any weapons systems and one man with a rifle or a bomb wouldn’t insure a victory. The original plan called for a team with backups built in to insure a clean hit with little or no exposure. Must I remind the general that we have already have missed the object twice and we can’t afford to miss again.

EBE
We can offer you a tiny device from our community that would insure your victory..
 

Harry
I would be willing to do it, since I was going to ride as an observer.

General
You want me to authorize a civilian to fulfill a military mission?

Harry
General this is a joint mission. Who does what does not matter. The fewer people involved the fewer people we have to protect if something happens.

General
True..but the ship.. we only got buy off if the saucer did not carry weapons. Now with this…

 

Harry
If we don’t get this done now and done correctly, a buy off doesn’t mean a hill of beans because we all are going to be locked up or destroyed. We have killed and maimed too many people over too many years to be forgiven. My father said that they should have started the ovens in 39 instead of 42. There would have been no evidence by the times the Russians came through the gates of Auschwitz only fields of red poppies.

Chief Daniels
On a yellow brick road…. How fuckin’ sweet..

Capt. Jackson
Daniels, you’re dismissed.

Chief Daniel
But sir, this is bullshit. Fucking grays and nazi bastards and us killing our own. For what, so that a little old lady in Iowa and the fuckin’ Pope may not have an heart attack? Get real. I smell some green stuff changing hands at the expense of Joe citizen. Is that what you signed up for sir? To become hit men for the rich? For what? A pension that is a tenth of what these fuckers make in a week? Because I certainly in the fuck didn’t.

Capt. Jackson
James and Billings escort the chief out. Mater of fact, the team is dismissed. I will see you in your barracks in 10 minutes.

Capt. Jackson’s team leaves, in disgust. Once they are out.

My apologies general.

Harry
(Smiling whispering to himself)
Out of the mouth of babes.

Capt. Jackson
(Looking at Harry in disgust)

General
Taken Captain. Is there anything else gentlemen? No? Then our saucer will depart immediately, without back up and rendezvous the friends three mile from St Lukes. Our friends will create a disturbance while our saucer pressrooms the kill. Understood Captain Jackson?

Capt. Jackson
The device will kill only the target?

EBE
Yes, Harry knows what to do. Excuse us general we must get ready to depart. Harry please follows us.

(They rise and leave the room followed by Harry. All other remain gentlemen stay seated.)

General
(Once Harry and EBEs are gone under his breath)

Fuckin nazi’s and grays. Jesus Christ
Any other questions..dissmissed.

(The pilots and the xo file out leaving the Captain Jackson and the General alone. Captain Jackson waits until they are alone.)

Capt. Jackson
Daniels is right sir.

General
I know he is right and a lot of us hold the same sympathy, but we must wait.. for the right time.

Capt. Jackson
(Looks at him strange)
For what sir.

General
For a change, Captain, for a major changes in this country and hopefully the world.

Capt. Jackson
Sir. Are you talking of treason?

General
(Bristling)
Treason? No! Patriotism, yes. Is it right to have the multinationals dictating to the US what to do? Is it ok for us to be bowing and scrapping to the EUC, China and even to fucking goddamn Vietnam? I don’t think so, and I know that you and your men don’t think so either Captain. If you bide your time, within a month you will be called on perhaps the most dangerous mission of your or any of your team’s career. Can you wait Captain; will you help us in taking back this country for the common man, the working stiff? Will you?

Capt. Jackson
(Moved but wary)
I will wait and I won’t say anything until the time is right. But if you put my or my teams life’s at stake for some two bit heroic bullshit than your ass is mine..do I make myself clear?

General
As clear as bell. Dismissed Capt.

(General gathers his papers while Captain Jackson leaves. Two minutes later an aide in camouflage fatigues walks in. He salutes the general and comes to parade rest.)
General
Confine Capt. Jackson’s team to the bunker until we leave. After that fly them and up to Montana. Be sure there are no loose ends.

Aide
Including their official personnel files?

General
Yes. They won’t need them where they are going.

Aide
Yes sir.
(Salutes turn around and walks out of the room.)

General
(His cell phone rings).
Yes.
Voice
Beautiful piece of acting you must go to the stage after you retire.

General
I have thought about it.

Voice
Good.. then we are all set. Mr. Christian will be taken care of and the Capt Jackson’s team will be blamed. Brilliant plan,
General.

General
Thank you. I will look forward to a further discussion on your vision of the new government.
Voice
Good until then..Goodbye (in German)

General
Goodbye (in German)

FADEOUT

FADEIN
Scene X
12/23

(Internal shot of Jeff’s St Luke’s room. It is night. We see Martha sleeping on a cot near his bed. Jimmy asleep in a chair. Jeff opens his eyes violently and sees an ¾ EBE floating above the foot of his bed.)

Jeff

(Not surprised to see the EBE. Jeff, knows him by sight.)
Shit.. Did you shrink since the last time or am I having a flash back?
(
EBE
Neither. You are seeing a hologram. Keep your mouth shut and listen. The Community has decided its time to save Earth from humanity, so we are going to show ourselves on Christmas, in seven different spots. Then we are going to deal directly with people and try to pound the fact in your head that you are destroying a pretty nice place and if you don’t stop shitting around it will all be gone.

Jeff
How thoughtful of you. After 55 years of wrecking peoples lives and letting assholes take your technology and get filthy rich while other people live shacks finally you think is time to show your self. Tell me this o little mighty gray turd can you tell me where is my family? Can you tell me if they are alive or are they sitting a test tube on some moon around Sirus. Can you tell me that you little shit!

EBE
(Shakes his head)
For our spokesperson and guide, you must work on your language oh dick breath.

Jeff
(Shaking his head)
I ain’t your fucking guide. I tried the hero bit 8 years ago and it cost me my family. The black chopper boys told me to shut up and my boys might grow up pissing like me and my wife won’t end up being bed candy for the real Jabba the Hut.

EBE

(Pissed)
Listen you worthless piece of self pitting slime. I didn’t want you to be our guide, I thought George Lucas or Spielberg would be better, but their dance card was full. And we couldn’t trust that piece of trailer trash that is sitting the White House and certainly can’t trust that Texan Odessa throw rug that is about to get elected. And the rest of the world doesn’t look much better, so we came up with you after a couple of months of smoking fermented Mar bat dung.

Jeff
Any good?

EBE
(Realizing that he had been duped)

Now I know why they wanted me to try this new method..those fuckers wanted me sober!

Jeff
I got to save humanity’s ass with a ET who is drunk.

EBE
And proud of it!

Jeff
Shit. Weren’t you suppose to retire after last time and have babies… or whatever you have…

EBE
Tried but my mate left me for guy with a bigger head.

Jeff
It happens to the best of us.


EBE
Anyway we need your help in order to save Earth from your fellow shit heads.

Jeff
Are you guys sure you really want to do this?

 

EBE
I know what you mean. You guys have beat the planet up pretty bad, but if we don’t step in now there won’t be anything left and WE might need a place to kick back one of these days.

Jeff
Why don’t you wipe out Man and let it go fallow and use it as a clubhouse.

EBE
Some of the Committee recommended that, but it goes after our “deep commitment to life”, whatever that means.

Jeff
Sounds like someone didn’t have any balls. Where I come from when you have rabid dog you kill it.

EBE
I know it sounds strange to you, but that are our ways and cowards or not we chose to live by them…Are you going to help? I need to know because I have to pee and once I stop transmitting it takes 24 hours to recharge the holographic projector. So can you make up your mine or you will see me turn violet...

Jeff
I don’t know, I have to think about it. Come back tomorrow and I will let you know.

EBE
We see him listening to another conversation in his head.
Oh nooooo” you are in big doooodooo!

Jeff
What the fuck!

EBE
I have just been told that our adversaries in The Community want to kill you and anyone around you.

Jeff
Can’t you stop them.

EBE
We can and will stop our craft, but our laws do not allow us to interfere with human activities.

Jeff
So you are going to let me, the one that you want to be your spokesperson and guide, the only one in the whole fuckin planet get his ass shot off while because of some fuckin law?
EBE
I know it sounds very strange to you

Jeff
Strange? Strange?….No it does not sound strange it sounds like a fucking bad Star Trek script I once wrote while a three day bender on Wild turkey.. I read it a month ago and puked, sober.

EBE
It’s the truth. I’ve got to go or I’ll turn myself violet. We will keep our kind away from you but you must defend yourself. You got 30 minutes. Later… oh,,it was nice seeing you again you slime ball… later..love and kisses to Frank I still think he is cute. I should have kept him, he was such a cute little fucker.

Jeff
Nice seeing you… you fuckin little pervert..

(Once The EBE disappears Jeff lays down for a minute and wakes up startled and begins to scream for Martha. Martha jumps out of the cot and goes to his bed)

Martha
Jeff what is it?

Jeff
Get me a phone now.

Jeff
Jimmy, Frank, Bill wake up you fuckers they are coming.

Martha
(Trying to calm him down) Now Jeff, calm down.

Martha
(She presses the button for the nurse)

Peg.. Peg get off the damn phone to Bill and give me a hand with Jeff.

(A nurse (Peg) comes rushing in while the men get up from the chairs etc and help restrain Jeff.)

Jeff
(Trying to get up)
You fuckers let me go. The are coming..they are coming
Martha
Who is coming?

Jeff
The bad ET’s. they are coming to kill me and all of you.. we must leave.

Martha
Jeff(shouts) JEFF! Please calm and talk to us or else I will we have to sedate you.

Jeff
Hearing this calms down and takes control of himself.


Martha
Now.. now that is better..what do you need Jeff?
Jeff
A phone please.

Jimmy
Hear take mine.

Jeff
And I need some privacy.10 minutes.

Martha
Gives Jeff a cautious look

Jeff
10 minutes is all I need

Martha
Who are you going to call

Jeff
Frank.

Martha
Jeff its 3 am.

Jeff
I know.. Lily will be pissed, but I have got to talk to Frank.

Martha
I am going to hear about this at church OK everybody out of hear

Martha starts to get everybody out of the room. Jeff Waits until everybody is out the room. Punches Franks number and we hear the phone ring. On the fourth or fifth ring a woman answers it.

Lily
Groggily
Yes

Jeff
Lily it is Jeff Christian I need to talk to Frank.

Lily
Jeff? It is 3 am and Frank didn’t get to bed until 1. Can’t it wait until tomorrow?

Jeff
I wish it could Lily I need Frank now.

We hear Frank wake and ask Lily who is it. Lily is reluctant to give the phone to Frank But Frank demands the phone. Lily gives it to Frank.

Frank
Jeff?

Jeff
Yeah it’s me. Elmo came.

Frank
Disbelief
Jeff could it be as dream, maybe the drugs, the DT’s.

Jeff
Serious
Frank I am sober and my spine tingled like when you get shocked from electric fence.

Frank
Concerned
After all these years, what did he want?

Jeff
They are going to show themselves on Christmas eve and they want me to help.

Frank
Oh my God

Jeff
..That’s the easy part. Come to find out there are still bad grays and that the black chopper boys are in with them again. They have been behind the last couple of attempts at me and they are coming again.
.

Frank
Scared
When?

Jeff
In 30 minutes.

Frank
Scared and concerned
Jeff if this is a dream, a joke or a flashback I am going to lock you up and whip your ass myself.

Jeff
Soft with tears in his eyes
Frank, it is the same as it was near old man Johnson’s place the first time and just like the patrol near DaNag. The same damn way. Elmo talked to me. Frank they are coming. The world will finally know!

Frank
Can’t they save you?

Jeff
You know it’s not their way. I tried but they wouldn’t budge a inch.

Frank
Blowing wind out as a tension relieving device.
Let me speak to Jimmy

Jeff
Yelling
Jimmy. Boys get your ass in here, Frank wants to speak to you.

The men come running in and Jef gives Jimmy the phone

Jimmy
Yeah Frank..yeah shit..double shit! OK

Gives the phone to the deputy. Jimmy begins to get Frank’s clothes. While he is doing this he goes to the window and pulls the blinds down three times. This is a signal to the outside watch that something is wrong. Jimmy then goes and helps Frank on with his clothes. Martha comes running in with Peg.

Martha
Jeff Christian where are your going at 3 am?

Jeff
I need an ice cream cone and a blowjob.

Martha
Calmly
There is no ice cream stores open and Mari Louie’s is closed during the holidays, you know that Jeff.

Jeff
Stops dressing and looks right into Martha’s eyes

Martha Graham I love you and God knows you have put up with a lot of my shit since Maggie and the boys left, but please believe me when I say that if we don’t get out of this hospital NOW we are going to die.

All the lights in the hospital go on and the nurse comes on the speaker.

Nurse on speaker
This is not a drill. The hospital must be evacuated immediately. All patients who can walk please get up and do so. All patients who are well enough to help please help those who can’t help themselves. This is not a drill.(repeats the above sentence again.)

We hear sirens in the background. Jimmy helps Martha get Jeff dressed and helps him into a wheel chair. They go out of Jeff’s room into the hospital corridor

CUT TO:
Internal shot of the hospital corridor from Jeff’s POV. People moving toward the stairs and the elevators in controlled chaotic fashion. We see firemen coming out of the elevators to start to with the evacuation. Jeff’ security team steers Jeff toward an elevator that is empty and also leads to a side entrance. Once they are on their walkie talkies with the other members of the security team. We hear Bill’s voice on the walike talkie he asks if Jimmy has got his cell. he says yes. Bill calls and Jimmy gives the phone to Jeff.

Bill
What is the situation.


Jeff
I had a visitor and we will have more in about 30 minutes.

Bill
Force?

Jeff
Don’t know. Definitely two separate groups. One will be the visitors and the other ours. Our friends will take care of the visitors, we must defend against the others.

Bill
Understood. We are waiting for you downstairs and will resort to plan X. Can you travel?

Jeff
Do I have a choice. Yes I can.

Bill
How is Martha and the boys doing.

Jeff
OK scared shitless but functional

Bill
Good a couple more minutes and we can get all of you out of there. I see you coming down now…

SCENE XI
12/23
CUT TO:
2 saucers appear 300 or so feet over the hospital. One slightly bigger than the other. Three seconds later a third, smaller than the previous two appear. The third saucer and the biggest of the first two craft separate swiftly and began to climb at a extremely fast rate. Then they begin to do a dog fight high over the hospital using some kind of light as a weapon. This produces a colorful show, similar to a laser or fireworks show. We see the crowd stand aghast in the snow filled streets watching them. Bill sensing danger works frantically to get his team into the humve he has parked next to the hospital. He drives slowly away and is followed by two exact humve. The third craft spots the convoy and begins to tail them.


CUT TO
Inside of the Humvee
Bill is sitting shotgun. Jeff is sitting with Martha in the second seat. There are two guys in the back facing toward the back in the third seat looking out of the back window.

Bill

Makes a call on his cell phone.

This fox we have the bear and he is alive. Go to cover say again go to cover on my mark 5 4 3 2 1...Mark.

Hangs up and takes another phone. He presses a predialed number and waits until the number he is calling answers.

Bill
This is fox radio check over.

We hear Jimmy in the second car and the third car answer, all using code names.

Bill
Roger..read all five by five. On my count go to plan delta alpha beta…I say again delta alpha beta over

Both cars acknowledge

Bill
This is fox stay with me and keep the line open. Revert on covered backup if we loose contact for five minutes. How copy

Car one
Roger

Car two
Roger

Bill
Car three do we have visitors

Car three
Roger. They are behind us about 100 feet at 150 feet. Over

Bill
Copy. Cars three are you ready?

Car Three
Yes

Bill
Car two?

Car Two
(Jimmy)
Roger

Bill
On my mark 5 4 3 2 1. Go.

The last Humve stops short and pulls into the nearest alley. The second Humve takes the first right humve and the lead Humve drives three blocks takes the next left.

Voice over
This DL1 to base. Party is breaking up while still on concrete request permission to execute.


Dreamland
DL-1 this is Dreamland control. Roger. Go in for kill. Make it clean. I say again make it clean. How copy?

DL1
This is DL1 Roger Clean. Request authorization.

Dreamland
This is control the authorization is Roswell. I say again Rosewell.

DL-1
I copy Roswell. I counter Sirius. I say again Sirius.

Dreamland Control
I copy Sirius. Good luck Dl out.

DL-1
Control this DL-1 out.

We over hear on the intercom.

How close do you need


Harry
75 feet

Pilot
Roger taking her down. Are you ready?

Harry
Yes, just like Namn.

The UFO goes after the lead vehicle, which is in an alleyway.

CUT TO
Internal shot of the lead Humve. Billy is on phone and the two guys in the back seat have the back seat rolled down with a disposal anti-tank gun aimed at the aircraft. A man next to him has a hand held spotlight.

Billy
On the phone.

This is fox are you ready two?

Car Two
Jimmy
Ready.. are in position. Got your back

Bill
Silence

Car two stick to strict radio discipline or we all are going to be killed. Copy

Car two
Roger. We are in position Craft is at 100 feet and descending slowly. No sign of any opening.

Bill
Can anyone see any ports on the craft?

Car Three
I do. Looks like two glass ports in the forward part of the craft. I can see figures and movement. There is a third port opening.

Car two
Craft at 80 feet.

Bill
On my mark three two one. Fire

At Billy’s order the CO
man in the back of his humve turns on his spotlight direct ting the beam right at the two glass port holes while the man fires the missile. We see car two directly behind car one three blocks away firing its missile and lights causing a crisscross effect on the craft. The craft takes both hits just as Harry was firing this weapon. The impact of the missile hit causes Harry to fire the gun back onto the craft causing it to disintegrate.

Bill
Car three are you getting this?

Car Three
Shit yes. Catching everything. It will be on the net in 60 seconds.

Bill
Roger that. Don’t forget the copies. Car three capture all info and depart. Keep your heads low. Will be in contact. Cars two are you ok?

Car two
Car two O.k. I did not see any casualties from the craft.

Bill
Confirmed that. Let us get the Bear home. On my count 3..2.. 1

Both cars turn on their light drive out to the street and drive out of town. We see the second car fall in line

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