Poetry / Options

Everyone has a free will to do

Whats right and wrong -

Yet people were born to waste it. -kai yoshinaga

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July 16, 2009

barrettzrun

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barrettzrun reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

i’m not sure people have a choice. some are right, some wrong, but their experiences make them so.

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April 08, 2009

urbanrenewal

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urbanrenewal reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

This comes off more as a quote, more so than poetry. Maybe switch the section, because as a quote it’s resounding and has a great impact, but as poetry, it seems a little short and stunted.

If you change the section it’s in though you have a rather beautiful quote.

You do good work!

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March 19, 2009

side

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side reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

Not too many poetic elements in this one. You play out the idea of your statement very explicitly. Usually poetry happens to involve a more intricate way of making the meaning implicit and to make images, beauty, sensory perceptions, and the like explicit. Like a gift (the meaning) gift wrapped (in poetry).

Just my opinion. More of a quote this one.