Poetry / The Sonnet of Judas Iscariot (Analysis)

I like the fact that it is a sonnet of a subject not widely delved upon. Creativity is important.

You know, I’ve never heard any type of thought from Judas’ perspective, and I liked what you did with this one.  I believe it was pretty true to life, Judas obviously felt awful.  And its written pretty well.  I’d also say, maybe work on the ending a little bit.  It comes to an abrupt stop, and it doesn’t end very climatically (the poem, not Judas’ life).

it’s a little grim. But good format. Tells the story. Work on the ending.

Wow, this is Judas in a nutshell. My minister would think this is cool. What I liked about it is I could understand the language (besides it being English); most poems I have to read like 2-3x’s to understand it. This is simple to read and yet powerful. Some people think they have to write like they’re Shakespeare to have a powerfully engaging piece; this is so not true, and you’re the example. Keep up the great work. Share this with your church. :D

Its very interesting, and I liked reading it…although found a couple lines like..S2L2 a bit odd as its grammatically wrong and kinda throws of the rhythm..Same with S2L4 and S3L4.

I felt the last stanza was unfinished..and instead of it being a sonnet like you said…try keep to your four line structure…could make the ending more powerful.

i found this line really beautiful..”While I stood with greed in my callous heart”..and sums up the mood of the poem really well

all in all i did enjoy reading it.

beautiful

I think this is very publishable in a book of Christian poetry.  It is well structured, clear and tells the story of Judas like a tombstone.  Very Grim as is to be associated with Judas.
Personally I thought it was too predictable.  
I would have enjoyed a new take or interpretation of Judas.  Even if only a peripheral one.  

I think the significance of some of the language could be expanded on, for example, “potter’s ground,” and the city of Gethsemane.

I think this can find publication in some Christian forums or magazine. However, understanding the format it did take me a couple of readings to understand the story because some words seemed awkward in certain places. Anyway, I think the poem is solid. It would have been nice to see a little bit more suffering but I still liked how you built the story and narrated the situation. I think more emotion would have brought my depth to the piece and made it more emotional.