Poetry / Angel Wings

   Thank you for your kind words. I am glad that you understood this. I often wonder how I pulled this from my head to make so much sense, but our brains work in stange ways at times, often subconsciously. I will look for your poem. :) Thanks again.

No problem it was my pleasure and i agree someone or something is often directing us with these beautiful thoughts perhaps destiny is in the hand of angels.

Well, I did not exactly mean that, but I can see how you might think that :)  I meant when I wrote this, I had no idea what I was putting to paper.  I write seemlessly under inspiration, but always see the words I am writing as I write them.  Does that make sense?  With this poem, I had no idea where it was going or what I meant until I finished it and read it again.  It made so much sense as to my heart, I was flabbergasted I did it lol.  It was all me though :)
  And to answer you, I believe destiny is in our hands, it is our choice if we choose to follow the destiny planned for us, or the one we selfishly try to grab a hold of. Do you agree?

I think you might have a point here destiny is what we choose through impulse or blind faith but ultimately our lives are like an open highway and we can choose many different routes, there will be sliding doors nothing is ever set or guarenteed.

The ony thing that we can ever set is our attitude as we live through it…

Ha… I talk of destiny so differently in these two. My mind is funny sometimes :)

I wonder how you would like to shape your own destiny what are your aspirations and desires for your future if you had control and money was no object?

I would like to open up my own art gallery in the centre of luzern in switzerland and have an appartment looking over the lake opposite the pilatus mountain.

I would be happy studying, learning culture, traveling, and volunteering my time I think. Idk. I am happy in college right now. We will see where my lifes goes. I just take one day at a time right now, but my wants would fill the page I think :)

I see so nice to meet a lady who is so humble and not materialistic i guess life remains in the united states then? no possibility of moving abroad right now?

Thanks for the review. :)

Thanks… I’m glad you got most of it. I like the ending because it’s hopeful :)

Thanks for the review.  I do not write for the reader, I write for me :)  I would suggest reading the poem a few times and think of love…every poem says something different to different people…they are not all supposed to be completely clear… :)

Dean Sky, i must interject. This is not a review but a statement.Poetry is often ambivalent. You need to read deeper. You must look for parallels and contradictions. You must look for the beauty of the thought. If you cannot understand this then read more poetry. You have to tell her what you didn’t like and be specific. If you review like this all the time urbis writers are going to be steamed. iT IS A WASTE OF CREDITS. Sandi

Thanks Sandi :)

Well then I shouldn’t be on this site. Who am I to say whats good and bad with their writing? Im a 20 year old who barely started writing a couple months ago. What do I know of good poetry? I can only say if I liked it or didn’t. The only reason why I “critique” is because you have to.

   Don’t worry, everyone has to start somewhere in their reviewing. In the forum, there are detailed suggestions as to how to review.  It might also help you to read others reviews and think about the way they approach them. I’m here if you need anything. :D

Thanks for the review :)

Thanks!

my pleasure…

Thanks for the review :)  As far as the “flow” is concerned, maybe I just don’t have the breaks right because reading this out loud sounds great…I’ll have to look at that some more.  Is there a particular line or lines that stick?
   As far as the meaning goes, it’s about relationships, love… with that, disappointment, hurt, and hope…but I’m one that believes that poetry doesn’t have to make sense to readers, as long as it has meaning to begin with… :)

Hmm, well, on second thought the flow is ok.  No worries.  If it’s about relationships, well, yeah, I can see that now.  Sometimes all it takes is a little prodding from the author and you can see what’s going on.  
There’s always feathery violence isn’t there; always contested realities within a relationship, which leads us to confusion, obfuscation or maybe a little self deception. That’s why relationships are great poetry fodder.  

  That’s cool, I never thought of that in the poem, but it fits well… My mind just dumped into this…all subconscious. And now this just won me a creative writing scholarship…I’m so excited :)  Thanks for the help.

thanks :)