Poetry / Stupid Poem

i think it was good to express your iner thoughts i brezzed right threw it i did not see any erros i realy enjoyed this piece i think many people would relate i loved it

very good. i love how you started it. in “and writing helps fills that hole for a little while.” i think that it should be “and writing helps to fill…” very good!!! i love it.

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April 13, 2009

by Preacher

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My sentiments exactly. You just wrote how most poets feel.

“To sit and listen to my own thoughts.” Wouldn’t you be recording your own thoughts instead of listening to them. Does this work better you think?

“to say that their not just another strange face.” I would take out the word strange. Just another face would be adequate.
You might add something like this to make the poem more meaningful.

“and write because everyone should know their genius” This looks awkward. Writers write because they have too. The are compelled to record their thoughts.

The poem is a little contradictory. You can’t stand writing but you do so to keep you from being depressed. This is very nice but it looks like something that should go under the genre of blogging or journal writing. It looks like a stream of conscience work. Nothing wrong with that. I enjoy raw, pure writing. My suggestions are above. Good Luck. Sandi

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April 12, 2009

by Preacher

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