Query Letter / "Living Donor 101: Everything's Relative" memoir query
When my sister Mary’s kidneys faltered, I made the decision to give her one of mine. Though nearly 100,000 people in the U.S. have become living donors, no one has captured the stress and doubt of the rigorous evaluation process, or the absurdity of keeping urine in the refrigerator for 24-hours in a jar that suspiciously resembles a two-liter bottle with a handle.
No one admits that being a living donor without a successful outcome makes you a pariah.
Not every living donor walks away with a green ribbon pin, and a sense of accomplishment. We suffer physically and emotionally, and no one at the transplant centers or the national transplant organizations offer us any support or guidance. In fact, no one knows definitively if it’s even safe to be a living donor long-term because we’ve never been important enough to follow and study.
In the same way Amy Silverstein threw a spotlight on transplant recipients, and myriad memoirists have written about the cancer experience, I want the world to understand what it really means to be a living organ donor.
I advocate now: through my website, www.livingdonor101.com, which strives to educate and support prospective and present living donors as well as encourage improvements in transplant law, and through other online communities and mailing lists. I recently participated in a conference call for the Obama transition team for the Department of Health and Human Services, and was invited to apply for OPTN/UNOS’ Living Donor Council, which develops national policy on transplant-related issues. In addition, my experience and efforts will be detailed in the next edition of Mount Union College's alumni magazine.
{This project compliments your client list of……} I am glad to send you my complete manuscript for review, and discuss with you my ideas for supplemental articles and essays that can assist in the book’s marketing.
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This seems like a good query letter.
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Your query has long running sentences, which indicates that your story would probably submit the same. A query letter is an example of your writing, especially when describing the story. Try cutting your sentences down a bit to avoid confusion and being tossed to the side from your agent of choice. “In the same way Amy…’ This sentence is way too long. You could make two sentences with it by rephrasing. Move some words around or even add some.
Your query letter should be specific which is, but I feel you might be rambling. The follow website provides more tips http://www.poewar.com/how-to-write-a-query-letter/
Good Luck to you.
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Well this letter is very well written and its quite unique in topic. I never honestly even thought about it until this letter. I never had any thoughts about the donors at all. That makes me rather uncomfortable with myself. I am thinking right now to my self…”why and how could I have not thought of this subject.” absence in the mind does not mean that the “nothing” is not real i guess.
As for the idea of publishing, im not sure what you want published? This letter? or do you have a book written that this letter will push? Im appologize Im just confused. But I am glad I read the letter it is really interesting.
First just a compliment on the whole concept of what you are doing. I admit that I never thought of the donor when I read of living organ transplants. It just seems natural to focus on the one needing the organ.
I would only know this was a letter because you told me it was. Well, I guess the very end would have let me know even if you hadn’t mentioned it.
I do have just a couple of suggestions.
First – Your second sentence is a little out of control. THe change from the tense to the funny is too abrupt. (I know it isn’t funny in reality, but it reads that way as you describe it.) I;d just cut it into two sentences. IN fact you tend to use very long sentences throughout the letter. Maybe consider shorter more numerous ones.
Second – Third paragraph No one -—- OFFERS.
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