Journalism / Life

"There is nothing wrong with you, i just dont see us in a relationship." That is pretty much all I have herd my whole life. This one seemed to sting the most though, only because I though Kevin was different that I maybe had a chance with him, however slim that chance may be. He is quirky, funny, outgoing, confident, cute, everything i am not. My unruly curly hair makes me want to go into a dark corner and cry, my crazy father wants makes me want to bawl, and I really am starting to hate life. Kevin and i are somewhat friends, but I don't understand why we can't be something more. Is it my hair? My crazy life? My immedite response is "Nes." A no and yes. How am i suppose to know? I don't understand why boys dont like me. I am smart, somewhat funny, pretty(thats a stretch), and slightly annoying(isnt everyone?). So I guess it is not whats wrong with me, but what's wrong with them. But i just can't accept that answer. NO! It's me, all me nothing is wrong with them it's alll just me! That is what the devil on my shoulder tells me, and its begining to seem that way.

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May 12, 2009

necessary824

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hmmmm…..quite an insight into your psyche. You don’t come across as a self-doubting person; this insecurity surprises me.

Specifics:
Always capitalize “I”
Start a new paragraph at That is pretty much…. remember our dialogue rule?
I thought Kevin, not I though
maybe is one word
dark corner and cry(.) My
I love the “Nes” – very telling! I’d start that on a new paragraph though too.
why boys don(‘)t like me
(that(‘)s a stretch)
(isn(‘)t everyone)
not what(‘)s wrong with me
it(‘)s begin(n)ing to seem that way.

I think you could expand on this – write a short story.