Short Story / Connection

You know when you're in middle school, how you start having feelings? Not just for you're "immediate" friends, but for someone completely out if you're range. That's what is going on with me, Emma Granger.

I am in my freshman year in highschool and school is almaost over. I've waited so long to ask him out. But my other friends have asked and he's rejected them all. I'm starting to get doubtful. Though, my friends encourage me. He has the perfect profile every girl dreams of. He doesn't play a sport, but is willing to play if asked. He's Scott Hanson.

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July 10, 2009

FrakKevin

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FrakKevin reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

So far…I actually like this. But make sure you post it in young adult next time.

He doesn’t play a sport, but is willing to play if asked.

I say remove the second half of the sentence. Use it more describe how he’s not really a typical jock, nerd, or what ever other cliche teenagers are labeled with.