Lyrics / Unfinished Song

I take a deep breath

When I hear your words go in one ear

And out the next

You complain about sketches that have been drawn in pen

Yes, the pen was in my hand

But you added onto the sketch after everything was said….and done

Exaggerated in detail

Imagined it all up in your head

Nothing is left for me to say…..to you

You scream your thought

They hit the wall as I crack

My head screaming every time you come near

Even in whisper

It’s never clear …to…me

Why I saw what I saw

When I gave you that chance to rip into me

Again

I take a glance

While you sit there screaming on the phone about nightmares only you can see

Yes, I was in those dreams

But you created them to justify

You create them to escape

This need to destroy everything that makes you happy

The need to destroy all that I created in me

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July 14, 2009

cooljim102055

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cooljim102055 reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

hi,
i like the begining when you refer to writing the sketchs with a pen..your pen..and how a person can imagine and make things all up. i suggest a title like..”what’s really real?”...as it seems it would go with this..(but of course you would have to mention it throughout your lyric..i think a constant rhyming pattern in the verses would help alot..maybe rhyming the 2-4 lines throughout also..to make it memorable and singable..not to mention radio friendly in the mean time…ok, i yapped enough…hope i helped…take care..jim