Poetry / Light brings shadows
Memories of hate are more rememberant
Than memories of love
Although they are like the sun and moon.
They both were once
Held in a eternal embrace
Yet it was out of love
Thet despised each other
For hate and hate
Were once tied by love ---
Yet the strands of passion
That once bounded them
Was broken to create an eclipse.
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I like it too.
Very creative.
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Rememberant is not a word. A should be an one place. Thet is not a word. Should probably be that THEY despised each other? And perhaps Were broken instead of was, though I could be wrong.
The conten, in my opinion, seems like a hazy pasted together version of different popular themes that are themselves rather incoherent.
This poem is quite incoherent. I have no idea what you are talking about. It is just a bunch of random symbolism about good and evil and love and hate. The very end shows promise using an eclipse as a metaphor, but everything behind it makes it ultimately fail.
i like it…hate manfiests out of love..and sometimes no matter how much love was there the bad always seems to shine brighter. well at least that is what i took from it. “thet” guessing that should be that.
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