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Poetry / The Fire ! (Analysis)
The Fire !
The Deil's game of constant dree
Pangs with every thought - a sigh !
Such a fool that feeds his sorrow ...
Through waning hours - I die ! I die !
Why should I in listless stour
Yearn for fire - 'tis sure to pass ,
Even if thou kissed me sweet -
Sure to lose thee , O bonnie lass !
So thus I pine , and thus I wend
Unto a nowhere place of nane ,
Alone ! Alone ! Immured in madness -
What is worth Edenic's Pain ?
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8 - 23 - 09
the dark knight -
track 14 - 5:30 - 6 :20
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MoSanchez reviewed Version 1 -
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I’m not hugely into poetry, but I actually liked the intensity of this poem. I don’t know enough to give you any technical critiques, but I did love your choice of words especially with the old-timey speech, so well done!
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waywardreiko reviewed Version 1 -
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Well, it is not every day one comes across a poet whom can write using the tongue of yesteryears, impressive in its own right. To show the depths of madness one may endure for even the hopes of a fated love says much of you, your desire and regret as beautiful and disasterous as fire’s chaos, your poem’s simile, wonderful. For future writings you may want to divulge a bit more, involve specific examples, even if it is a single word, to make it your own. Anyone can read and write of fiery passion but what sets the great poets of history apart from the rest lost in the books is their ability to create a piece of work and make it their own, at great cost to themselves for they are revealing their deepest parts explored, something so admirable and courageous it is a surprise they were able to continue seeing others at social events without wanting to run and hide, for the most part. But again, well done your language is well used and the message profound, just make it your own!
nonsensical reviewed Version 1 -
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Cute, and what amazing words. Very archaic, but it works, it still connects to a world today. At first (personally now), it just drew on some strange emotion, but I can see the entertaining portion of a person in woe, ever so in woe. The words though, were the best, and the form is put together in a very stylish fashion—not free verse style, very structured, and it works.
KarmaSutra reviewed Version 1 -
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The atmosphere was really well though out. I enjoyed it but it could probably use spellcheck or a cursory glance at it.
joshuasambula reviewed Version 1 -
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Very well written, I enjoyed the poem very much.
Your use of English is a bit different than my American English, but I wasn’t lost and still understood it very well. At least I believe I do lol
Good work
JscottR reviewed Version 1 -
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TravisMaximus reviewed Version 1 -
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It reads like a few of the more contemporary of printings of Faust.
Bibelotredux reviewed Version 1 -
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Well composed.
Good spelling.
Good punctuation.
Good flow.
Now for the real review: maybe you should try living in the moment? A bit dire drear, non? Maybe an eye-patch and a parrot would liven it up a bit.
Loved it. Bibelot
Jeannine reviewed Version 1 -
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This is a bit… chaotic maybe? It is all a bit senseless in my opinion, you jump perspective, you talk to and about someone… This feels like it should be part of something bigger before it starts making sense. But: For some strange reason, I like it… even if it leaves me rather confused…
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