Screenplay / EDEN Page Two

Yeah, I do need to tear these down, put them in one file, and write some more so there’s actually, at the very least, a complete thought going on. I didn’t know what I wanted to write about when I started this, so that shows.

When I wrote this I was doing it just for format practice and I posted it to see what others had on the format of it. Considering I had to do all the formatting over by hand (lots of hitting the spacebar), I didn’t have it in me to do more than one page haha. So, page two kind of deflated and ended up in transcript-mode.

I’m glad you like my dialogue! Considering TV is a lot of talking, that’s pretty exciting hehe.

Thank you very much!

I’m still working on how much or how little action I should be “backseat directing” with in my scripts. I could just put that she sighs and the actress (if I ever have one) will sigh in whatever way she feels is best for the character.

I’m also working on introducing problems, at least more fluidly. In writing short stories and novels you can kind of build up to them, but in TV writing, since you only have between 30 and 45 minutes to work with, every scene has to progress the story. I might just be trying too hard to cut the fluff.

You are doing well. Keep it up. Sandi

I’m falling back on the good ol’ “I read” thing (again), but as I’m following a professional script as an example when I’m writing, I’ve found they capitalize words to emphasize actions and important sounds.

But, it’s almost as annoying to type as it is to read. Go, go caps lock.

I thought about it, but one, I don’t really have a long term plan for EDEN, it’s an experiment, so it’ll kind of go wherever it wants to go.

And two, especially for these two one-page pieces, I’m not planning on adding anymore like them. There’s not going to be anymore 1 page additions, so I think it’ll be easier to get an idea of what’s going on.

I’m not panicking about formatting anymore, so writing is actually getting easier.

Thank you!

Yeah, it is just one page, so I understand the brevity of your review. Thank you for taking the time to read over it anyway!

There’s a lot of things I need to rework in this that I think I glossed over or didn’t take much time to think about because I’m working so hard on format.

I’m glad it has, at least in a little bit, done what I’ve intended it to do and thanks for pointing out the stack of papers. I guess she would know, now wouldn’t she?

Thanks for your time!

Well, look she could have had him investigated and found other stuff out that made her suspicious. This would go along with your scenerio. Megan, can i give you some advice please. The first rule of writing is to write about what you know. If you know about big business and fraud by all means write about it. But if you don’t know that much then go on to something you know intimately. You write very well. I would like to see you write something you know by heart. Think about what stirs you thn write away. Heep me posted Sandi

Haha, I keep getting told that, but as fun and fantastic as small-farming-town drama is, I don’t really want to write about grumpy government retirees and pregnant high schoolers… Though I’m sure there’s a young adult novel in there somewhere hehe.

No, i do not mean that at all. If you want to write a story about big business and fraud, scams, murder, etc, you will have to do some research. I am not against going beyond the pale and i like your interest and moxy. You will do well. Please keep me posted on future works. Your friend, i hope. Sandi

Haha, ok, so no lengthy out-loud monologues. I guess since I usually write short stories, it didn’t occur to me that someone prattling on for a while wouldn’t be much fun to watch.

And I’m posting it one page at a time because I’m still typing in format in Word, so I’m only finishing about a page a day. Trying to not let my account get stale, I guess. Once I get faster with it, I’ll post more than one page at a time. I know it’s silly doing it this way hehe.

I’ll have to look up the last name thing. Even though my program attempts to auto fill-in words that I’ve used before, it would be nice to not have to type them again and again.

I was hoping that the set-up of her speech would come across as her speaking quickly and forcefully, so that Aaron couldn’t say anything. But! Now that I know it doesn’t, I’ll work on it.

Thanks again!