Young Adult / The Castle made of Clouds. (Analysis)
"It's raining."
"Yes it is. " i reply. We stare out the window and watch the rain drops fall to the concrete and form puddles. It is cold. I hate the cold. But even now i am temped to run out and jump and play in the rain. I like the sound that cars make as they drive through the puddles.
Everything looked so sad and boring. Maybe it was because the sky was grey and depressing, or maybe because everything was actually grey and depressing. Oh how i miss the sun. This endless winter has gone on too long. Where is the life? The birds? even they dissapear in the rain. I bet if trees were not rooted to the ground they would leave and search for the sun.
At school we are taught that the sun is joy, life, love, and fear. We would be nothing without the sun yet here we are. Sunless. My mother told me that God was very angry with some of us and took the people he favored and the sun up into this giant castle mad of clouds and light. This was supposed to be the end of the world. but nothing really changed. Except for the sun. It was gone, and hope went along with it.
Hell is on earth. Some people say this is no Hell at all. Some say this is a Hell as good as any. I think this is Hell and honestly i think God is very clever, for what would be more Hell like then to never see sunlight again? To always walk around and see nothing but grey? At night time it is worse. Nothing but blackness is seen as far as the eye can see. The screams are the worse. Some say it's just the wind but people go missing everyday. Some say they have seen the Devil. i believe them. If God can take the sun and all the good people then the Devil can roam free.
My mother is a devout christian. I believe that Jesus Christ is my lord and savior. But one thing i dont understand is why God left me and my mother in this Hell. My mother says he didnt leave us because he doesnt love us. She says he left us because God loves all his children and doesn't want all of them to burn forever. He wants all his children to join him in Heaven one day. Even the Devil. So thats why we are in Hell. To spread his word.
I had a little sister once. But God took her too. My mother says that he took her because she was too little for a mission like this and that i was old enough to do this. I do not feel old enough. I do not feel brave either. And secretly i am jealous that my sister is in God's warm embrace with the sun while i am here talking to sinners. My mother says not to call them that, but to me that is what they are.
It's funny how even when people actually see the evidence and see Heaven come down from the sky and see God take the sun they still refuse to believe. They dont even want to be saved. Some people actually believe that the sun just burnt out. Like poof and it was out. The Devil must be enjoying his playground. At least thats what my mother says.
She also says that we arnt the only ones God left behind. I cant imagine some being filled with so much love that even as his children scream he is not real and some run to the Devil with open arms that he could still want to save them. To bring them in the light. His love is never ending. I believe that. My mother talks to God. One day she promises i will too. I hope so. For i will not be able to help anyone if i do not know what to say. These people Burn the bibles and murder people who still believe.
This rain may never end. My mother says it is God trying to keep the world from bursting into flames. I hope this is true because i do not wish to burn. My mother leaves me by the window and starts packing. We are trying to move. The screams have sounded like they are getting getting closer at night and my mother is scared.
Things are different yet the same. People still drive and go to work and school, but people are more violent. People go missing everyday but it's not a big deal. Whenever i know someone that goes missing i pray for them, my mother does the same.
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Although I’m not particularly religious (not at all actually) I enjoy the end of the world scenarios and I like the way yours played out. You had some grammatical issues with capitalization and some spelling errors but nothing huge that a read over or word processing program couldn’t fix. Should you choose to expand on this it would definitely make and interesting story/novel.
Good work and thanks for sharing.
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