Quotes / Whom Understands (Analysis)

My first question is “why have you got more ratings boxes than words?” I missed the story altogether on the first glance at the page.
Second, you’ve used a lot of very tough word groups – it’s almost a tongue twister (which counts it out as a quotable quote for me, though others may argue this enhances it’s value). I’d definately not start with the “Through whose…”
Third, I have no idea what exactly you’re trying to say…
It’s tough to offer advice on how to improve a 7-word story, but I truly think this needs a little more work to make it clear, crisp and concise.

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September 17, 2009

by dbrockman

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Well first I would like to say when I write, I write for me. So if you’re only looking to read things that you can understand with without looking outside the line google my son children book. “I Got The Shrinks” that he wrote at the age of 10 and published under DBrockman Publishing <—That’s meeeeeee. lol! Stop walking the fine lines. “Shut your eyes to everything you’ve seen, and open your soul to nothing you’ve written” There’s a quote for you. Thanks for the review….. dbrockman

September 18, 2009

by trident

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I’m sorry, I don’t even understand what you’re saying in the comment.

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The piece itslef has a deep base, but its structure is flawed: “whose” is relating to a question more than it is signifying to a particular individual. Unless you are refering to life being “whose understandings” upon which we may gain a better understanding of ourselves, or such, it leaves the quote confusing. But I enjoy the word order, allowing a Confucious style of thinking.

I tried this 15 different ways, got dizzy, and this is the best I could come up with:

We understand those through their understandings.

Not quite right- I know.

Bibelot