Poetry / Ragtime Refugee (Analysis)

thanks, very positive. honesty is important but constructive criticism is better.

I am sorry you did not like it. The poems meaning was not something amazing. It was a retro piece maybe explaining or showing the power of ragtime music. Ragtime music and jazz had a lot of soul and i wanted to create a piece that showed that. I understand your concerns about the piece and i respect your ideas but may not agree with them. I mean this is not a text book and there is not only one way and that is the only way to write. This is the type of writing, “poetry” where you are suppose to think of ideas and thoughts that are not always considered normal. So in a poem piano keys can sit, taming a inner best may be cliche or may be just to the reader and the climax and dead hault, what it means is that is going really hard at playing the piano to the climax of the piece but then stops and or hault to silence beating on one key in clarity. well very negative review. but you were honest and that is important. maybe ill change some stuff.
thank you
Patrick

I am sorry you did not like it. The poems meaning was not something amazing. It was a retro piece maybe explaining or showing the power of ragtime music. Ragtime music and jazz had a lot of soul and i wanted to create a piece that showed that. I understand your concerns about the piece and i respect your ideas but may not agree with them. I mean this is not a text book and there is not only one way and that is the only way to write. This is the type of writing, “poetry” where you are suppose to think of ideas and thoughts that are not always considered normal. So in a poem piano keys can sit, taming a inner best may be cliche or may be just to the reader and the climax and dead hault, what it means is that is going really hard at playing the piano to the climax of the piece but then stops and or hault to silence beating on one key in clarity. well very negative review. but you were honest and that is important. maybe ill change some stuff.
thank you
Patrick