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When you're little night time is scary because there are monsters hiding right under the bed or in the dark shadows of your closet. When you get older the monsters are different. When you are older your monster become; Self doubt, loneliness, regret and remorse. And though you may be older and wiser...
you still find yourself scared of the dark.
But all you have to do to fall asleep, right? But when your eyes close you find that the sleep never comes. You count the sheep...you say your ABC's backwards and forwards until your brain aches from the exhaustion.
We forget the simple remedy that worked when we were children. If I cried our in my sleep my parents would come and take me by the hand, and help me to look under the bed or into the closet to see that the monster was only my imagination.
Sleep..it's the easiest thing to do. You just close your eyes. But for so many of us sleep seems out of our grasp. We want it, but we don't know how to get it. But once we face our demons, face our fears and turn to each other for help...night time isn't so scary.
We just have to realize that we aren't all alone in the dark.
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‘your monster may become self doubt, loneliness, regret or remorse.’- I’ve changed this line because you said ‘YOUR monster’ as in the reader, not yours, the writer. And as many but NOT ALL of us consider ourselves to have ‘monsters’, you don’t need to be quite so presumptive.
The conclusion is a bit well-trodden- I don’t think it’s original enough to really stand out. This is your blog though, so if you want to keep this conclusion please do. But you could be braver and go into more detail about what your demons are. People are fascinated by that kind of thing.
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I think that it was a wonderfully crafted piece and that you deserve some decent props for your word play, because i think that you definitely have some talent for writing. However, i couldnt really feel the whole thing, cuz even i get nightmares now and then.
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