Poetry / The first artist after the apocalypse

rocks don’t taste good. It’s not a good idea to eat rocks, Hasukawa. Don’t do it.

Seriously, thanks for the review.

I didn’t take it literally. More of tasting the rocks and what they once meant and stood for. Like I said, i love the irony of the final three lines. Rockin’!

I didn’t take it literally. More of tasting the rocks and what they once meant and stood for. Like I said, i love the irony of the final three lines. Rockin’!

I didn’t take it literally. More of tasting the rocks and what they once meant and stood for. Like I said, I love the irony of the final three lines. Rockin’!

I didn’t take it literally. More of tasting the rocks and what they once meant and stood for. Like I said, I love the irony of the final three lines. Rockin’!

The site’s slowing up a bit isn’t it? This happened to me too…

Well, re the rocks : He is trying to consume useless fragments of the old (eg cliches?), which is no sane method to learn to create new “opera houses”.

I could explain this more in the text perhaps, but even if the reader doesn’t consider this interpretation, they still get the nice image of a man eating rocks. Maybe all the radiation has sent him a bit doolally.

Thanks for the review, (may I call you) Lunch (?).

Saying you have an artist implies that there will be vision and originality.
Oh, how I disagree.

Perhaps that’s the comedy of the piece
Yes, I will think about how I can bring this out more

I seem to use … more than most people, T. I must unconsciously love elipses. The idea here was as pause, to reflect the thinking process.

I don’t think that much about them. But as all my reviewers seem to dislike them, perhaps I should avoid them or replace with commas.