Lyrics / Creed
Am I still beautiful if you don’t know who I am?
Sometimes it’s hard to see
It’s hard to see, hard to stand (it)
I don’t know where we’re gonna go when we die
I don’t know if this is all there is to life
I can’t believe that it’s only what I see
I can’t accept that we’ve been living in lies
Every moment is a statement of truth
Ones and zeroes can never turn on you
Every heartbeat is a death and a life
I can’t accept that’s all we get for our time
Am I still beautiful if I don’t know the reasons?
Can you understand me when I don’t know what I’m thinking?
is it too much to ask, too hard to say? Why
is it always another time another place another try?
I don’t understand that’s all there is; hello, goodbye
I don’t know where we’re gonna go when we die
I don’t know if this is all there is to life
I can’t believe that it’s only what I see
I can’t accept that we’ve been living in lies
A mother weeps and the tears fall hot and warm
Full of life to a baby’s cheek stillborn
but she knows she will move on and she will
A life is all you’ll ever get
And the sound of wings will be the greeting at the end
Are we still beautiful, faces in the dark?
We shuffle closer, but we don’t know who we are,
The blind lead the eyeless to the cliff
and we tumble off wondering only if
But I don’t know where we could be in a matter of time
Everything changes in the space it takes to say
I don’t know what could happen to me or mine
Everything changes in the space it takes to say
I don’t know where we’re gonna go when we die
I don’t know if this is all there is to life
I can’t believe that it’s only what I see
I can’t accept that we’ve been living in lies
Every moment is a statement of truth
Ones and zeroes can never turn on you
Every heartbeat is a death and a life
I can’t accept that’s all we get for our time
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hi there,
it’s nice and creative with an opinion people are interested in and can relate to..all i can say it maybe to long for a song,,try singing it and see how the time goes,,(around the 31/2/min. mark) keep writing,,,jim
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I too enjoyed reading this piece. You seemed to have captured the feeling that every teenager has, concerning whether or not they are appealing to anyone and questioning what’s life like once you get out into the world. A few suggestions though, the flow seemed to get off at times, more or less, in the 3rd and 6th stanzas. If this were put to music, you’d want to try to make the syllables fairly close in count to eachother, otherwise, it seems as if your rushing to get the words out in one place and dragging them in another. Another thing is that your rhyme scheme varies throughout. You seem to use a 1,2 scheme, a 2,4 scheme, and an unformatted scheme. I know that sometimes it’s hard, because of what you want to say, but try to develop a more consistent rhyme scheme. Other than that, i really don’t see anything wrong with this piece. I loved the ending with how you came back and used the best lines of the piece again. “Every heartbeart is a death and a life. I can’t accept that’s all we get for our time.” I love those lines. They are very deep and yet simple at the same time. good job.
I really enjoyed reading this! Your words are so meaningful and they have so much energy in them. I love the words, flowing of the words, the meaning. You did a wonderful job! I hope to read more of your work!
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