Haiku/Senryu / uncorked

Ahhh… A haiku that references the original inspiration of the genre. As if Basho himself had pondered the same.

Although lacking any seasonal reference, which is no biggy, this piece speaks to the heart of the haiku. The power of a question often invokes the start of a personal mental soup.

The word ‘bottle’ is a little jarring, no pun intended. I don’t know why I stumble on this, but it disruptthe flpw for me a little bit – it could just be me. Points for honoring the genre!
nice.

I could derive no meaning from this.  

The capitalization and question mark seem to make it all one sentence, but I can’t determine what the question is or what it means.

Perhaps I’m just missing something.

Cheers-
RR

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December 24, 2006

by Mrbeer

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hmmm… how open can you be if you know everything?

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Hmmm, I am not sure what you are saying in your haiku.  But, I thought it was pretty interesting.  I liked how you used the image of the light headed bottle and Buddha’s tree.  Are you referencing these images to you yourself and contemplating on your own life or values (religious, etc.)? I did enjoy your piece.  Good job.

Very cool Senryu you got here, monsinieur brewski…very coolio indeed-e-i-e-i-o u a thanks for sharing this little bit of enligtened conemplation…no sleeping under Buddha’s tree…it’s a white zone for passenger loading and unloading only.  Groovy cat…very fly…fly paper fly…sticky trap of meaning.

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November 14, 2006

by Mrbeer

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i’m da horsefly i’m bouncing off walls…

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Im gonna give haiku I review a high score because I either love it or hate it.  Well this is just a little less love than norm.  I like it. It’s amusing to me. Okay..wait just read it again and now I love it. Something about it speaks to me.  I think haikus are abstract but tie something together.  Gotta be the part about the open and then the bottle, but under a Buddha’s tree?  Like that so…I don’t know what Im saying but it’s either yes or no for me about haikus and this is yes.