Haiku/Senryu / Retirement

When I read the title I thought this was written by someone who was retired.  After reading the haiku I see that you meant ‘retirement’ as in someone who is resting or who is ‘retiring’.  I don’t think anyone uses this word for this meaning anymore, but people used to and so its usage is cool.  This haiku mentions nature and the way the words are written, perhaps because of the inclusion of the ‘lotus’ it has a very oriental feel to it.

The mention of the two types of flowers and the ideas of the lotus growing slowly almost seems to suggest a quiet life free of the hustle and bustle of the modern world.  This haiku can also be somewhat of a puzzle as to whether you are quietly meditating or whether in quiet meditation these are the things on which you would occupy your mind.  There are more possible meanings and I like the way the words seem to quietly settle down into my mind.  They leave one to ponder over things after the words have been read.  Good effort.

The way I take this is once you retire you now have time to “watch the grass grow” as it were, have time for yourself.  Something to ponder at a yougn age.

10 out of 10. I want to retire so bad i can smell your mothers roses!

Rhyming wise, perfect.
You’ve done the haiku perfect without too many or too less syllables. The meaning behind this haiku could be many or few, I liked this one for the many comparisons I could use it for. Excellent work. Thanks, for sharing.

Wow! Your Haiku is highly evocative. I loved it. Thanks for sharing. :)